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Review #1, by BBHP Chapter Nine: Regrettable Endings

14th November 2017:
Another excellent chapter! And I loved your mention in your Author's Note. :) It made me smile!

I sort of figured something like that would happen with Nathan, but I was still shocked when it did. And it was made 100x worse by his disdainful comments about Lily's birth. Terrible. Awful. Malfoy-esque. How could someone belittle another person like that just because of their family background? And I'm still at a loss as to how did he even get sorted into Gryffindor! And how did Frank not realise his friend was such a deplorable human being? I guess the impending war/current events/random attacks are bringing out the worst in people...like Alice, who seems to have withdrawn from everyone. I hope she lets herself come back to the comfort of her friends. And I feel like Lily will come out of that experience with Nate being even stronger and more determined to fight for her side, for the rights of Muggleborns (which is probably what puts her on Voldemort's radar in the first place?).

James is so sweet!! He is exactly as I had hoped he would be in this. Playful and funny and silly, but sweet and fiercely loyal to the people he cares about, slightly inclined to revenge/get even with those who've wronged him or his friends, and always up for pulling a good, harmless prank to lift the spirits. He's wonderful. (And Dumbledore was perfect in this, too.)

I love Lily's unrecognized jealousy over James and Emmaline. And since her other friends are bothered by their display too, she can just blame it on being a loyal friend instead of jealousy. I can't wait for her to figure out she's in love with him. It's going to be sooo good (and worth the wait, because I'm guessing it won't happen too soon).

Anyway, it's all wonderful. There's so much more I'd like to say but in an attempt to not seem obsessive or redundant I'll stop here. Can't wait for the next chapter, though.

Author's Response: Ah! Thank you so much for taking the time to review! It's always a joy to hear from you! And you're so welcome! I always appreciate your reviews!
I always love playing with the idea that not all students are going to fit into the typical House "characteristics". I really like challenging those sort of ideals within the houses and I really feel like Nate did a good job of that. People are complex and I think that he could be brave and bold, yet also have a bad side.
I really like the way James' character is shaping up as well. I've always had a clear vision for how I thought his personality would be and I'm glad that is shining through.
Dumbledore was one of the more challenging ones for me to write, but I think his character came out better that I thought it would.
And yes! I don't think that she would have realized right away that she liked him as more than just a friend. She had issues with him in the past when she was friends with Severus and I just don't think she would have completely fallen for James right off the bat, let alone that she would realize that she was.
And seriously, thank you, thank you!!! For always taking the time to read and review for my story! It always means so much to me! :)


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Review #2, by EmmyBacon Chapter Nine: Regrettable Endings

14th November 2017:
Nice update!
I like the fact Alice has seen what Nathan is truly like, but I also loved the fact that wasn't an automatic resolution. That doesn't happening real life!
There's a real relationship developing with Lily and all the boys which is coming on beautifully. Great job
Emma x

Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my story! :)
And thank you so much! Nate wasn't going to go away even though they broke up. He still is in the same school and House, she would have to see him-sometimes on a daily basis. So I defendant agree, there would not have been any sort of automatic resolution.
Again, thank you so much for reading my story and for your comments! :)


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Review #3, by BBHP Chapter Seven: An Evan's Family Christmas

31st October 2017:
Such a good chapter. All of the interactions were perfect. I love how Lily's father stood up for her. And Petunia was totally believable. Jealous and insecure and bitter, and exactly how she seemed in the books. Excellent job on this.

Author's Response: As always, thank you so much for taking the time to review! I always love to hear from you!
And thank you! I really wanted to be able to portray the family dynamic the way that JKR seems to explain it. So I am definitely glad it came across that way! :)


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Review #4, by BBHP Chapter Six: Another Semester Ends

25th October 2017:
I loved how this chapter went. Lily's confrontation with Nate was totally believable. Gosh that guy is a jerk. A possessive, manipulative creep that I don't think we've seen the last of. The marauders retaliation was funny. It was enough to hopefully get Nate off Lily's back for a while, but relatively harmless. I'm looking forward to seeing how Nate's new feud with James will affect their quidditch team.

Poor Alice. I hope we get to see more of her soon.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to review! :)
And yeah, I think Nate is a good example of how you can't just expect everyone to be a house stereotype. He's in Gryffindor, but he's not necessarily the best person in the world.
And don't worry, Alice will be back before too long! :)
Thank you again for reviewing!! :)


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Review #5, by HarryGinnyLove88 Chapter Five: It's For the Best

23rd October 2017:
Finally they broke up..now James has a chanse with Lily 🙂

Author's Response: Yeah, I feel like the relationship with Nate sort of played itself out quickly, but it served its purpose I think. :) Thank you again for taking the time to review! Always a pleasure to hear from you!

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Review #6, by BBHP Chapter Three: Dates and Drama

21st October 2017:
James's awkwardness over being around a crying girl made me laugh out loud. I love little things like that and Lily's mention that treacle tart is her favorite dessert. Like I'm seeing little things that make Harry. It's funny and sweet. I'm really enjoying the story and Lily's date.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to review! You're review just made my day! :) And thank you so much, I'm so glad that is coming through the way I intended. I am so glad you are liking the story!

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Review #7, by HarryGinnyLove88 Chapter Three: Dates and Drama

17th October 2017:
why i have this bad feeling about Nate...he seems too perfect so something have to be going on, even james has his flaws.
well so far i like the story keep writing.

Author's Response: Well thank you so much! I'm glad you like the story so far! And you'll have to keep reading to find out about Nate! Thank you so much for being my first review! :)

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