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Review #1, by Felpata Lupin Better Now Than Later

12th March 2017:
Hello!
Here reviewing the entries for the Telling the Parents Challenge! :)

Oh... poor Marietta... this didn't go exactly smoothly, did it? But I'm quite sure that her father will accept it in the end.

It was interesting to see both points of view. I can sympathize with Marietta for feeling suffocated by her parents' overprotectiveness. Sometimes the people who love us tend to see us as unable to take care of ourselves and to make our decisions for us, which can be difficult to deal with at times.

On the other hand, I can understand her parents. She is very young and inexperienced on many things and still unemployed... I bet any parent would think a marriage at that stage of life would be premature...

The fight was really sad. I wish the tones wouldn't get so heated, but apparently the Edgecombes do have some anger issues... but as I already said, I'm sure her father will accept her decision and be happy for her in the end. And obviously, it was a good thing that she told them straight away. Waiting would've only made it worse.

I do have a tiny bit of CC... I felt like this piece could use a little bit more description, it would give more feeling to your narration. I did love your dialogue, though. ;)

Thanks for taking part in our challenge and good luck!

Love,
Chiara

Author's Response: Hi!

Yes, it didn't really go very well. I was trying to show both sides of the argument, and had a little trouble when writing about her parents, actually. I think I may have been just a little bit biased ;)

Ah, I always have trouble with balancing description and dialogue, because the latter is so much easier (for me at least) I'll keep that in mind in the future, though :)

Anyway, thank you for the lovely review, and for setting this challenge :D


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Review #2, by Aphoride Better Now Than Later

18th January 2017:
Hey there! :) Dropping by for the BvB review tag :)

Okay, first of all - that ending. Wow. It's such a great portrayal of that kind of explosive, firework-style family argument, where both sides are totally convinced they're right and neither one is prepared to back down. The insistence, the way it can so quickly end up a huge shouting match, the peace-maker relative who tries to calm things down but doesn't succeed... it's so true to life, and I love that. I also love how they both have points, you know - 17 and jobless is hugely young to get married (though I was confused by the age thing - if she's 17 shouldn't she be at Hogwarts? She'd be in 7th year, right? Coz you leave Hogwarts at 18?) and hugely precarious. Yeah, she has Roger and they've been together for much longer than her parents think and when people are in love that's the main thing, but practicality is cold and has to be considered at some point :P

I love how supportive Roger is about the whole thing - how he reassures her when she's worried her dad will never calm down, how he helps her through the argument and advises her to tell them early to give them time to adjust. I love that he seems to sort of understand why they're upset, even if he doesn't agree with it - it's always so much easier to do that on the outside, you know?

Your characterisation is also so lovely :) We never learn much about either of them in the books and you've given them lovely, fleshed-out personalities in this beyond the books. I love how capable and responsible Roger seems, and so caring of Marietta, and how Marietta is so highly-strung and so emotional - how she flares up so angrily (and fair enough, really!) when she thinks her dad is accusing her of not being faithful, and how she regrets accusing him in turn of controlling her. It's that kind of natural swing of emotions in an argument and you do it so beautifully - none of it feels rushed or random or anything :) It's really impressive :)

Your writing is lovely, too - you have a lovely flow and a great voice in this: it suits the characters so well :) Your dialogue is also so good - it feels very natural.

This is a lovely story! :)

Aph xx

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this wonderful review :)

I was trying so hard to make the shouting match realistic, so I'm glad that paid off :D I had totally forgotten Marietta was supposed to be 18 when she graduated-clearly I need to work on my maths :P

I think Marietta is sometimes thought of as a traitorous character and nothing more, so I tried to show that she could also love someone and have passion. The ending made me sad even when I was writing :(

Anyway, I'm so happy you liked the story, your review was very encouraging :D


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Review #3, by Beeezie Better Now Than Later

14th January 2017:
Hey, I'm here for BvB!

And oh, dear. Oh dear oh dear oh dear.

I really appreciated the characters you chose for this - I'd have never thought of pairing Marietta and Roger, but I absolutely love the way you executed it and I found them really believable as a couple. I also loved the brief reference to how attractive Roger apparently was in the books - you didn't overplay it, but it's clearly on her father's mind, and it really helped clarify what some of her parents' concerns were.

But to be honest, I think that what I liked most about this was that it decidedly was not good news. While I was on Marietta's side and wanted her parents to calm down and be reasonable - because yelling at her just could not end well for anyone - I could also understand why they were so concerned and opposed to the idea. She's only 17; of course they don't want her to jump into this, even though (with all the idealism in the world) she and Roger really do believe they can make it work.

This was a really lovely one-shot. Great job!

Author's Response: Hi!

So I didn't like the idea of Marietta and a random OC so since Roger and Marietta were both Ravenclaws and around the same age, I thought why not pair them together?

To be honest, I found it a bit hard to find a reason why Marietta's parents wouldn't approve, apart from her being too young. Marietta's case just seemed stronger when I was writing but I'm glad her parent's concerns could be understood clearly :)

Anyway, thanks for the review, feel free to do so again ;)


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