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Review #1, by The Birthday Goblin III. The Nubian Giraffe

13th August 2016:

THE BIRTHDAY GOBLIN HAS ARRIVED! I bet you thought I'd forgotten about the lucky last review, dinja? But no, I had to take mummy goblin to the dentist. She gets rocks and small bones stuck in her teeth. You know how mothers are.

You have SO MANY beautiful stories on your page I just couldn't pick one. But I have, and I'm thinking of sending my alter ego round to read and review the rest of them.

The actual painting you included is beautiful and a perfect detail. I love paintings.

I have never read a story in the perspective of a giraffe before (shocking, I know), and this idea is so originally and wonderfully done. Like seriously, what a fantastic, quirky little gem. Your descriptions and details of the other portraits and how they interact with each other is amazing.

This is our last riddle! Are you sad? Are you happy? Are you still trying to work out the last four?

I am the child of hatred and love,
And without either I would not have existed,
Back then I portrayed survival and hope,
But now Iím a reminder of tragedy and loss.
What am I?

Paula, I hope you've enjoyed your special day because you're a very special lady and you deserve all the good that comes to you.

Until next year,

The Birthday Goblin


Author's Response: Oh birthday goblin! I'm going to miss you!

Ugh, mummy goblins. SO needy.

You know, I haven't seen many stories in the form of giraffes either now that you mention it. I'm so glad you liked it because it was very experimental!

This was the other tricky one that hung me up a bit (and tbh my husband actually was the one that worked it out). The hatred and love and would not exist at first made me think of Tom, but the rest didn't really fit so it's not Tom. The child of love and hate. When we talk about love in HP it's almost exclusively Lily's love. Survival? Well survival is pretty much Harry's specialty. A reminder of tragedy and loss? We think (think being the operative word here) that it's about Harry's scar. Is it? I'm going with yes unless you tell me otherwise.

I can't wait for next year just so I can see you again, birthday goblin!

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Review #2, by oldershouldknowbetter I. Portrait of a Lady

26th April 2016:
OK so, I'm trawling through your story page, trying to find something to review for the latest BvB, when I come to this. I also wrote a story for this challenge, so I think I'll give this one a go.

In the first few lines I see that you've taken a very different tack to what I did with my story. In mine I have Draco looking at paintings and coming away from them with astounding realisations - what I've known from personal experience to happen when one finally sees some of these masterpieces in the flesh.

But what you've done is remarkably different, and it's fantastic. I never thought of this challenge being taken in this way and I love it so much. I very rarely think about what the characters in a painting must be thinking, I do sometimes, but not often. But to be able to do so, where the painted characters could be actually able to tell you somewhat of their thoughts and actions leading up to their imortalisation on canvas, is astonishing.

To have a character from another painting wondering/asking these questions too is mind-blowing.

To have it being done by a painting from the Renaissance era, for one from the Impressionist school, means that this poor woman has been having these thoughts for scores of years, if not centuries - I'm so ... after being mind-blown with the last, I'm floored by how unable I am to say exactly how floored I am. ;)

Not only is she projecting her own feelings into the painting across from her, she is also pining for him. Projecting her own feelings of inadequacy upon any feelings that he might potentially have for her. It's so sad and also so humanising for the subject of these paintings that live a very two dimensional life upon the walls of Hogwarts.

The comparison between the two styles in which the paintings are done is good too. As well, the way you have tied it into the emotional state of your protagonist and the perceived emotional state of whom she is observing. His bright colours and the seemingly slapdash way in which he is painted, would definitely give the impression that his character was similar.

The 'ginger girl', the 'four wild haired boys' beautifully oblique references to the Marauders.

I like that the formality of the time and the class of the subject has translated to the subject herself. It prevents her from fulfilling her desires to at least introduce herself to the man of the painting, so foreign in setting and tone from her own.

But he is the forward one, and to that extent he comes to her - it leaves me wondering, just how long he has been interested in her and has not pressed his own suit because of her seeming aloofness and higher social status?

He enters her frame and to her total delight does indeed 'parley her Anglais'. It's such a wonderful ending.

Well done on this chapter, I enjoyed it a lot, especially as I hadn't ever really thought of this situation occurring at all.

I have a slight CC if I may. If I can lay it at the feet of this wonderful chapter, is that when I looked up the painting that you cite as the inspiration for the young woman, it has no grassy bank for her to recline upon, nor does it have any cherubs. Are you referring to a different painting, perhaps? Or are these cherubs unseen in the painting itself, behind her or in the frame so that they are not in the reproduction I have found on the internet?

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the CC because I just looked back at my chapter notes and I wrote down "the one with Simonetta Vespucci" (if you happen to know much Boticelli you'll know that hardly narrows it down). The actual painting was "Mars and Venus" but I wasn't incorporating Mars because he's worthless to my plot! Have a look at it if you get a chance! It's wonderfully done!

I like to think that they've probably felt that way for sometime. I think it would be nearly impossible to sit across someone that long without at least being curious!

I don't think I could write a story without at least a little bit of my favorite characters incorporated in it!

I'd like to think that hundreds of years of exposure to English children would help them learn the language. They say immersion is the easiest way to learn a language!

I'm very humbled that you enjoyed the story! Thank you for the review!

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Review #3, by Melted Daylight III. The Nubian Giraffe

13th March 2016:
Another great chapter! I loved your description of what it was like for the giraffe to pass through multiple pictures at once. Whenever I read passages in the Harry Potter series that mentioned the pictures, I always wondered what it was like for the inhabitants. It's really unique to read a story that focuses on elaborating such a fascinating part of the cannon.

Author's Response: I'm so pleased you like it! For now I have at least one more chapter finished, but I can only post stories one at a time so I'm updating a few other chapters. If there are any specific paintings you'd be interested in, feel free to leave a suggestion. Thank you so much for the thoughtful review!

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Review #4, by Melted Daylight II. The Dance Foyer at the Opera

11th March 2016:
I just read these first two chapters and I love them both! I really enjoy your descriptions of how the painter's style has expressed itself in their works. Your attention to detail and knowledge of how the pieces were made lends the story a great deal of life, and the subtle allusions to the Harry Potter story put a smile on my face! Keep up the good work -- I'm looking forward to the next one!

Author's Response: I'm so very pleased that you like it so far! The next one should be a bit more light hearted. It's in the queue right now so I hope you check back shortly and let me know what you think! Thank you so much for the lovely review! I really appreciate it! :)

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Review #5, by Chocolate Frog Cards I. Portrait of a Lady

11th March 2016:
Hello, doll~

This story is delicious, if I do say so myself. Of course, my own passion lies in singing, but I admit that painting is an important art form, too.

Honeybunch, you have done a marvelous job portraying the woman in the painting. She has some pizazz for a women of her time. Still, I don't think she's cut out for show biz. She's too melancholy for it. She needs to get out and live a little! Feel the jive! It's lucky the fellow came a callin', or she might have gone on being boring forever. He Charmed the Heart Right Out of her!

However, what I simply adore about this story is how clever it is. You are a fox! It's splendid how you described the life and inner thoughts of a portrait, and cleverly tied in allusions to the paint.

Inspiration has struck! I have an idea for a new song: Chubby Cherubs! I better be off, dear - I have to tell my producer about this!

love from the Spectacular Singing Sorceress herself,

Author's Response: Hello, doll!

I'm so pleased you took the time to read this little ole story of mine! :) She is a bit melancholy. Maybe a fellow in her life will liven her up a bit!

Thank you so much for the absolutely lovely review! It means so much!

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Review #6, by Zinn II. The Dance Foyer at the Opera

9th March 2016:
I am looking forward to the next story.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! The next story is already written, but I'm waiting for the queue to get another chapter for another story posted before I post this next chapter! Stay tuned!

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Review #7, by Zinn I. Portrait of a Lady

9th March 2016:
I love the idea of writing stories about the portraits. Don't stop now.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for leaving lovely reviews! I'm glad you like the idea! I've been sitting on the concept for awhile trying to figure out how in the world to do it right!

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