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3 Reviews Found

Review #1, by LadyL8 Bad Start

6th March 2016:
Hi there. I'm Lotte, and I'm also reviewing for the HPFF Review-a-Thon. But I'm so glad I got to read this story, because for a first story, this is really good. I'm impressed! :)

So I love Harry and Ginny. I'm such a Hinny shipper and not afraid to talk about it. So a story about the two of them is just my kind of story. And I think this was just so cute. I do feel like Ginny was having a tough morning, and it made me feel bad for her really, because I've overslept quite a few times myself and it's always stressing. You just need to hurry and grab something, put it on quickly, and very often you'll later discover you put on something strange or it's on backwards or something like that. Thankfully Ginny had Harry to help her out there, so she didn't make a complete fool of herself.

You know I loved that scene where they meet when he's returning to pick up something and she is about to leave. There's so much tension there that you could practically feel it, and it just became this amazing moment where you really see what kind of impact Harry has on her - she is actually a bit breathless when he comes close. It makes it so obvious that she is into him, so clear that she is in love with him, and he is so clearly in love with her too. And as a reader you're just sitting on the edge of your seat hoping they'll kiss, but then Molly ruins everything and you don't like her every much (well, you do, but not right now) :P

But did Harry really return to pick up something? I feel like Ginny's last comment there about it taking such a short time could be interpreted as him having only returned to meet her maybe. Or maybe I'm just reading too much into this? It's been known to happen :P

Anyway, I think what I'd work on is description. You're descriptions are good, I even said that earlier. I just think you could perhaps add a bit more of it. In the beginning everything happens really quickly, which in a way makes sense because Ginny is in a hurry, but I'd love to see a little bit more of what she sees, smells, hears and feels. I think it would make it even easier to imagine it all happening in my head.

But I think other than that you've done an amazing job. I'm really impressed, because this is ten times better than my first story in the archives. I'm sure that you'll develope into an even more amazing writer once you've written a few more stories and learnt your own strengths and weaknesses. Because this is such a good starting point, and I think I'll definitely be back and read more of your work sometime in the future because I'm really interested in seeing more of your work. Best of luck with the rest of your writing. And thank you so much for sharing!

Hope you'll have an amazing day

Lots of Love

Lotte

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Review #2, by Marshal Bad Start

6th March 2016:
For the HPFF Review-A-Thon

Hi, I'm Marshal (obviously). I stopped by here from the forms. We are doing a review-a-thon this weekend where every review done this weekend earn money to be donated to keep this site alive. Also I'm a Slytherin on the forums where we are doing an in house reviewing competition to spread the love of the house to others.

Anyway, your story was cute. Is this your first one on the archives? It isn't bad! I feel so bad for Ginny who is having a rough morning. I've been there before waking up right when I should be leaving for work. Lucky her she can floo in while I'm forced to face rush hour traffic which is a bear. I haven't used 'not toothpaste' before. That has to be horrid! Still the slow down and distraction of Harry was sweet and I like the impact Harry has on her. I wonder if Ginny has the same impact on Harry.

I can see that you are planning to write more. It will be interesting to see where things go from here, what with Ginny still running late, Harry getting what he needs but being so quick about it. So many things you could explore here! Keep up with the writing!


- Marshal
Team Ouroboros
"The end is only the beginning"

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Review #3, by MuggleMaybe Bad Start

6th March 2016:
Hi there! I'm here for the HPFF Review-A-Thon to raise money to keep this awesome site going strong.

I loved this! It's a perfect little moment of fluff between them. Ginny seems like she would be one to oversleep - I can imagine that, definitely! (And I'd know - I'm terrible at mornings! :P ) You wrote her very in character.

Having Harry tuck in her tag of her backwards shirt was genius! It was definitely an original way to bring them closer and get them to touch. I could feel the tension between them and I liked it! When they hold hands at the end, it's very sweet.

This was really fun to read. I hope you will keep writing more about Harry and Ginny!

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