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Review #1, by 800 words of heaven Wrackspurts and Regrets

2nd March 2016:
Heya! I'm 800 from Slytherin House over on the forums, and I'm here to paint the archives Green with Envy, representing Team Ouroboros! I noticed that you've just recently joined the archives, so welcome! Also if you haven't checked out the forums yet, please don't be shy about doing so! We're a lovely bunch of people and we're always terribly excited about new members! If you like it over there, maybe I'll even see you in the Pit (that's where us Slytherins hang out) sometime soon!

Now, onto the review!

I'm in two minds about Ron's fury. There's a part of me that agrees - crushes are dumb. But there's another part of me that's raising its eyebrows at Ron because I'm pretty sure he himself had a teeny tiny crush on Krum during fourth year - can't blame him, really. Victor Krum is very crush-worthy.

That first line of dialogue that Luna utters has basically captured the essence of Luna in a few clauses.

Aww! Poor Ron! He's struggling with his own crush! He's not taking being friend-zoned very well, is he? But alas, the heart wants what it wants, and Hermione's wants Victor's.

Woah! I was not expecting Ron to just kiss Luna! Literally everyone was surprised by this turn of events: Ron, Luna, me. I would've liked to see a little more build-up in Ron's feelings towards Luna before the kiss. Compared to the entire rant he has about Hermione, only a few lines were dedicated to him even noticing Luna at all. I feel that a little more balance between these conflicting desires would've made the kiss more believable, and less out of nowhere.

I am very glad to see that Luna, however, just took it in her stride in her own Luna way, and has already moved onto to bigger and better things - like catching Wrackspurts!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I was pleased to read it.

I agree about the build up to the kiss - I feel I could have elaborated on it a lot more. I tried to but then nothing sounded right so I just left it in the end. It's my first ever peice of fan fiction (actually my first ever short story) so it was more like practice hehe. I'm going to keep it the same so I can look back and learn from it :)

I haven't ventured over to the forums yet but they are intriguing. I'm glad everyone is friendly - I'll have to have a look-see soon. I have only very recently discovered the world of HPFF, can't believe I wasted years of my life not knowing about it!

Thanks again for the review!

Violette S.

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