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Review #1, by TidalDragon Upside Right

15th May 2016:
Howdy Frankie! I'm trying desperately to read all the Golden Paw nominees before voting and I have reached your story while taking a break from the novels (there are SO MANY novels this year).

I want to first say that I think the light you shed on dyslexia with this story was really great. I didn't know the truth of it until I met someone who actually had a sibling with dyslexia in college and realized it's much more than just occasionally mixing up letters which so many people seem to joke about saying "Oops, I got a little dyslexic." I think Lily's character is a really positive one for people to read for that reason because it shows that true dyslexia is no laughing matter and what a struggle it is for people who deal with it every day - but also strikes a positive note with how much they can still accomplish.

If I had any CC it would only be that I thought Lily's character took a less independent turn after she started to date James, which didn't seem to jive for me with the character you'd created prior, but it only struck me in a couple of lines so it didn't detract much overall.

Thanks for sharing this story with us!

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Review #2, by RavenclawFTW Upside Right

7th February 2016:
Heya Frankie! Just wanted to stop by and review this wonderful story. I was so excited when I saw this challenge and I can't wait to read the other entries, because yours is such a great take on it!

Wow, I'm so impressed with how you've handled Lily's dyslexia here. That is not at all something that I would've expected from canon, but you've adapted it really well to fit in with what we do know so that it comes off very believably. Not only does it seem believable, but it really explains a lot about Lily and adds a great back story to what we know of her.

I also love how you've connected it to how Lily and James grow closer, and the first scene at Charms was so sweet! I like how we don't get to see James that much, but we can tell so much about him from what we do see (like him helping Lily without judging her, even as an eleven year old).

I also really appreciate how you've portrayed Lily's disability through the style, and how it pops up throughout the story without her really understanding it. I think there are a lot of misconceptions about dyslexia out there, but this story took a really thorough look at it and I feel like I understand more about it now.

The only CC I have to offer is that perhaps replacing some of the exclamation marks throughout the narration with periods would clean the style up a little bit– mostly just in the prose during/after fifth year. I feel like that makes her come off a bit less mature than she seems to be in other ways and was a little jolting as a reader. That's just a really small thing, but I thought I would put it out there for you to think about.

Overall, this is a really sweet story, and I'm glad you've shared it here! It's not an idea I've ever considered before but you've written it really believably. :) Great job!!

--J

Author's Response: J!

I was so nervous about this story and I couldn't quite get it out of my head and so I started writing!

Thank you so much for your feedback. I tried to get it out there that so many people are afraid to admit a "short coming" and that its not okay to be different. Lily's insecurities keep her from getting the proper help she needs- and perhaps if she had said something to a professor- life wouldn't be so tough.

Thanks for your CC. I think I tried to make it a bit jolty because Lily in that instance is a bit jolty. Severus hurt her and betrayed her trust. She's completely overwhelmed.

As for dyslexia- I have a friend who has dyslexia and I don't know much about it. I admire her so much because she is a teacher who specializes in reading and the English department. I love it. I researched it a lot and realized I believed a bunch of things that weren't all the way true about it and that there is so much more to the disability.

Thank you for the review. It made my heart sing.

Frankie


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