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Review #1, by ImaRavenclaw Chapter 1

29th August 2016:
Hello hello Kaitlin! I'm back on your AP for a review.

Hmm, Seamus and Harry. I never really thought about that, but you did a really great job writing it. Of course this was for a challenge, but it still seemed like you really enjoyed writing it.

I'm assuming Harry and Ginny are divorced and Dean and Seamus were married but Dean passed. Is that right?

This was short, so there isn't much to comment on. But it was really sweet and I really enjoyed it.

Just one CC though, your chapter is called "Chapter 1", but since it isn't a multi-chaptered fic sometimes that kind of thing can be confusing.

I really loved it, and I hope you have a wonderful day!

Yours sincerely,

P.S. I love Deamus too!

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Review #2, by Challenge Cheerleader Chapter 1

21st February 2016:
Hey Kaitlin! I really liked this piece, and Harry's nervousness and overall awkwardness really came through. At first I was a little confused as to when this story was set, but as it got further in it became apparent. I must say that I was surprised to hear that not only had Harry divorced Ginny, he had already had kids. And don't even get me started on Dean dying! Anyway, I thought that the backstory you set up here is really true to how these things happen in the real world and it was easy to relate to Harry and Seamus. I loved seeing the contrast between Seamus's polite confidence and Harry's self conscious nerves, especially because many times Harry is portrayed as the confident one. Good job, and I'm sending you good vibes to finish your 100 challenges challenge!

-Challenge Cheerleader

Author's Response: Hello my dearest Challenge Cheerleader!

I'm so happy to hear that you liked this. I can understand the bit of confusion at first, but am glad it became more clear as the story progressed. I definitely wanted this to be true to real life, so I couldn't avoid the ugly things that happen in the world.

Thank you so much for cheering me on! I really appreciate the encouragement!


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Review #3, by Secret Cupid Chapter 1

14th February 2016:
Hello again, my dear!
This was another interesting story.
Harry/Seamus is definitely not a pairing I've ever imagined possible, but I really enjoyed what you did with them.

Harry's nervousness was so cute. And obviously, you wrote it so well. I loved how understanding Seamus was about it. I must say, it was a bit sad thinking about Dean being dead and Harry and Ginny divorced, but that's how life works, right? And it's a good thing that they both are giving themselves new occasions.

The closing was really sweet. Loved it. I really hope for them to have many more lovely dates and find happiness again in each other.

Another great story. Simple, but so moving, and made alive by your beautiful writing and description. You are a real master of words.

I'll be back again!
Your Secret Cupid

Author's Response: Hello Secret Cupid,

It's truthfully not a pairing I ever imagined either, but that was the challenge, to pair Harry with someone outside of cannon.

I definitely wanted this to be similar to real life and in real life people go through tough things like death and divorce.

I hope that they find happiness in each other as well.

Thank you for this lovely review and for all of your sweet gifts!


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Review #4, by merlins beard Chapter 1

10th February 2016:
Hey Kaitlin,
I'm here with your review for the Harry Pairings Challenge.

Let me tell you again how sorry I am that I had you break up your OTP...

It must have been really difficult for you, you ended up killing Dean to break them up. I guess that was the only way you could picture Seamus on his own and out dating again.

I think it's really sweet that Harry is so nervous and that Seamus tells him about how is first dates went after Dean passed away. They do have something in common there.

I love Guinness myself, I agree with Seamus here - choice of drink says a lot about a person.

I would have liked to have a little more explanation as to what happened with Harry and Ginny, and a little more indication as to when all this takes place would have been nice too - obviously Harry and Ginny already had kids before they got divorced, but how old are the kids now? Why did Harry and Ginny split up? What happened?

The ending was really really cute. I like that Seamus takes the first step there and I love that they want to see each other again... I think it's great that they don't take things further right away... after the very timid beginning of their date, it wouldn't feel right for them to end up in bed together on the same day. your ending is sweet and fun and leaves us with a promise for tomorrow...

Thank you so much for entering my challenge. I loved the story and I think you did a really great job, especially considering how hard it was for you to write this.

♥ Anja

Author's Response: Hey Anja!

Thanks. It was hard, but I'm pleased with the results.

Yeah, Dean's death after a happy marriage was really the only way I can imagine them breaking up.

So to be truthful, I wrote Harry similarly to how I felt after my own divorce. There's this weird nervousness because you just haven't dated in so long. You almost don't remember how to flirt.

Yeah. I can understand wanting a bit more background, but I was worried that it would make this too dark or take focus away from the date itself. Maybe I'll see if I can add a bit of that in somewhere.

Oh good! I don't write sweet endings very often, but I feel like after a good first date, most people are feeling very optimistic. And you're so right about them ending up in bed together. It would've been a bit too much after this tenative start.

Thank you so much for the fun challenge!


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Review #5, by HufflePuff_Blitz Chapter 1

8th February 2016:
Kaitlin! Hello!
I really really really really really loved this. Not just saying that because Harmus is my otp and I'm really happy that more are starting to appear. But this was so cute and adorable.
I love how you kind of kept it to cannon, with Harry still having his kids. That was a nice touch.
A couple of things I noticed was you had said "Worries" in the second paragraph when it looks like it should be worried. And then Seamus catching the feather on fire. Wasn't that in Charms and not Transfoguration. It's been a long while since I've read the first book that I might be completely wrong so ignore me for that of that is the case.
But once again I really enjoyed this! And maybe someday we will get to see more of you writing this pairing because it was really good!

Author's Response: Hey Kyle!

Thanks so much for stopping by to read this.

I'm glad that you like the bits of cannon compliancy mixed in with the new relationship. Harmus is a cute pairing for sure.

Thanks for catching those couple mix ups. I tend to type really fast, edit quickly and then post before I can start doubting my writing too much, so sometimes little typos get missed. I will definitely go through and fix those.

Thanks again for popping by and for your lovely words.


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Review #6, by DragonPoxPixie Chapter 1

8th February 2016:
Hi there! I saw this story on the recently added page and after reading it just had to leave a review as it is such a cleverly written one-shot!

I really liked how you could tell such a big story using so few words. The background of Harry getting a divorce and Dean passing (*sob*) made it very believable and gave it a down-to-earth feel. Also extra points for adding little bits of info on the lives of other characters in here without making it feel forced or out of place.

I absolutely loved the interaction between Harry and Seamus, all the way from the "just-two-mates-getting-a-pint-vibe" to the flirty Seamus being all nice and sexy! And then that kiss! *swoon*

Its really a very well-written story that took me right back to my own first dates (I'm sure you'd have a hard time finding someone who can't relate to Harry's nervousness!) and feels like it could be a part of a much longer story even though it's complete on it's own.

I hope this makes some sense as it took me over 10 times to write due to being interrupted all the time but- yeah, just had to let you know. Keep up this amazing work! Looking forward to read more of your stories soon :)

Author's Response: Hey Pixie!

Thank you so much for stopping to leave a review!

I felt like Harry getting a divorce and Dean having died were things that might happen in real life.

Good! Friendship and flirtation are two very important things in a relationship.

I definitely wanted this to have a feeling of realness to it. You're right. Everyone feels nervous on first dates.

Thanks again for such a lovely review and for your encouragement!


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