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Reading Reviews for Dancing Away With My Heart
  
6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Musing Dancing Away With My Heart

19th December 2015:
Hey LJ!

Merry Christmas! Here for the Ravenclaw Gift Exchange!

This was such a cute little story! I like how you weaved the world through Cho's eyes here. The basis of their relationship seems nice, with Cho having a crush on Cedric for two years. I loved the way they start making small conversation at the ball and progress from there upto their first kiss. Cho and Cedric seem relly adorable.

I really liked the way you tied this up with cannon. All the references to Harry, Krum, Hermione as well as to the scene where Cedric tells Harry about the egg are well placed.

I simply loved this story! This was a great read! Hope you are having a great Holiday Season! :D

-Emm ^_^

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Review #2, by Tonks1247 Dancing Away With My Heart

19th December 2015:
MERRY CHRISTMAS! Stopping by for the QTR holiday fun!

Iím going to start by admitting that not only is the first time Iíve read one of your stories, but itís also the first time Iíve ever read a Cedric/Cho. That said, I really enjoyed this story! I love how you picked such a big scene in the fourth book and written it from a different perspective with an entirely different experience. Especially as I feel youíve written Choís character so well.

Cho definitely sounds like a 14/15 year old girl and her interactions with Cedric definitely give away that sheís had a crush on him for quite a while. She blushes and isnít sure how to talk to him and itís awkward, but itís not the type of awkward that makes it terrible, you know? Itís just like that nerves, butterflies in your stomach thing where you donít know where to start talking but once you do, everything is fine. Definitely a relatable thing.

I also adore that this uses the Lady Antebellum song! Especially Dancing Away with my Heart. One of my favourite songs from them and it fits this moment so well. I do feel you could have put a little bit more description into the situation, and how Cho was feeling while dancing with him, and how she really didnít want it to be the end of the night, but I do feel youíve captured the song and the emotions and the interactions between the two of them.

Overall, this was quite fantastic. I enjoyed the read!

-Mikaela

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Review #3, by ravenclaw_princess Dancing Away With My Heart

12th December 2015:
Merry Christmas. Here is a gift for the Ravenclaw gift exchange.

I love dancing. It can be so romantic so I just had to have a read. This is a really sweet story and I'm feeling all fluffy now :)

I'm not a big fan of Cho, but regardless, you've done a good job of here and she is in canon with the books. She's a pretty girl and knows it and she likes the chivalry of Cedric who is doting on her and making her feel like a princess.

The romance as you've portrayed it suits the age of the characters. They are both nervous around each other which is what you expect from teenagers. This is new territory for them both so neither really know how to get things rolling, but eventually, they both ease into it and things become more natural.

I thought the part where Cedric ducked away to talk to Harry was a little odd. I assume this happens in the books (I can't remember) but as this adds nothing to the plot, it reads as a little random.

The first kiss happens really fast and is over in about two sentences. To really highlight this important moment for Cho, you might want to look at expanding this paragraph just a little to emphasise the magic of the moment more. Similarly with the second kiss. You say the kisses are magical, but I don't feel any of this magic from the characters.

I like how the story ends with Cho reliving the kiss and then falling asleep dreaming about the kiss.

Well done, this is a lovely, happy little story and I really enjoyed reading it.

Jacqui

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Review #4, by princesslily_36 Dancing Away With My Heart

23rd November 2015:
Hey,

princesslily32 from the forums here.

Cho and Cedric at the Yule Ball :D Awww they're so sweet. I don't like Cho much, but she and Cedric did make such a pretty couple.

Cho was how I pictured her to be - girly, blushing and loving chivalry and taken in by Cedric. And Cedric was just sweet. Not trying too hard to impress, and not too fake. Just being himself. The whole scene reminded me of something out of a chick flick :D It was sweet and romantic!

Thank you so much for entering the First Kiss Challenge :)

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Review #5, by Felpata Lupin Dancing Away With My Heart

5th November 2015:
Hi! Here for the review I promised you yesterday! :)

Oh, this was sweet... Especially the closing. I loved her awake in the dormitory, thinking of him, and then dreaming of him once she falls asleep. There is something so sweet in the image, and in the way you wrote it, too...

And I loved the dancing. I love to dance, and I was just trying to imagine the feeling of it, of floating around the dance floor in the arms of your loved one. It must be just sublime.

I think you really did a lovely job with this story. I loved the second half more, I felt it was more powerful and emotional, while the first part lacked a bit feeling in my opinion. But anyway, it was a cute and sweet story and I loved the characters and the way you built the scene.

Good job! Really well done! ;)
Much love,
Chiara

Author's Response: Hi Chiara! I'm so sorry that it has taken me so long to respond...I am so ashamed of myself!

I'm glad that you enjoyed this story and the characters. I will take a look over the first part of the story again - maybe there are some things I can edit to make it flow better into the second half of the story.

Thank you again for the review!
~LJ


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Review #6, by lunarlumos Dancing Away With My Heart

4th November 2015:
Hello, LJ! Your NaNoWriMo mummy is popping by!

I love the way you characterized young love in this one-shot. Cho is a nice fusion of the ideal person people want to be when dealing with a crush and the person most people actually are(awkward and blushing constantly).

I also like the dynamic between Cho and Cedric. They are realistically portrayed as kids just getting to know each other while crushing on each other. Some fics have a tendency to form unusually swift strangers-to-lovers relationships, so I appreciate you not making that leap in this one-shot.

Good luck on achieving your NaNoWriMo goal! (By the way you are no more than 23,633 words away. I'm sure you have less words than that to tackle, though.)

Author's Response: Spencer! Thanks so much for the review (and sorry for the horrible delay in responding!).

I'm glad you enjoyed the story and I'm glad that you found the characterization and their relationship realistic!

Thank you again!
~LJ


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