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7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Challenge Cheerleaders Twist

20th February 2016:
How can I resist a Remus/Dora?

You have a wonderful way with words, as usual. The feeling of having a child inside you has got to be the best feeling in the world - and I love how detailled and precise your descriptions were. As I read through the story I was able to picture the whole thing.

I loved the little details here - like Remus' mere smell being such a comforting feeling, and how she lay awake worrying at times. The best was the feeling of securilty you described her feeling with Remus' arms around her, at the end. It just seemed so real and so natural. Nothing about this story seems forced!

I should also mention that I loved the dialogue between Remus and Tonks. It was exactly how I pictured them - not mushy but a lot of love in their very existance.
The part at the end almost killed me - because we know how it all ends :( WHY COULDN'T THEY ALL BE A HAPPY FAMILY AND LIVE LONG? *too many emotions*

Rock on...and keem em coming!

K-A-I-T-L-I-N

A Challenge Cheerleader

Author's Response: Hello my dear Challenge Cheerleader!

I honestly don't know. Pregnancy has always really creeped me out, so that feeling actually sounds terrifying to me, but I imagine to most people it's a cool experience.

Having been in a long distance relationship with someone who was away at war, I tried to include little details that I remembered.

Oh good. I have a tendency to make fluffy, happy dialogue seem to detached, so I'm glad it worked here.

I know. I wish they could've been a happy family forever as well.

Thank you again for your review and for your encouragement! It really means a lot.

~Kaitlin


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Review #2, by HarryRonHermione Twist

28th January 2016:
Loved it, it was very cute

Author's Response: THank you so much for dropping by to leave a review! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

~Kaitlin


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Review #3, by Owlpost68 Twist

15th January 2016:
Kaitlin, first you beat me to Kenny's story so I can't post for team Gold, now you're going to make me cry?? really, I want to cry, like hard, more than I did in the movies. I'm not, but still, lots of sadness over here. The only thing I could think to cc is in the beginning you say the phrase "a great sense" twice in the same paragraph, and though the words "comfort" and "relief" are different, it didn't feel different because you said it in the same way. I felt like both the words needed proper representation :) They're important.
Anyway, a job well done with the emotions and the reviewing :)
Team Gold!

Author's Response: Hey Heather!

Sorry about that.

Why is it sad? This is a happy moment between Tonks and Remus.

Thanks for catching the awkwardness in that phrasing. I will fix it up.

Thank you for the lovely review!

~Kaitlin


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Review #4, by Unwritten Curse Twist

6th January 2016:
I'm crying again. I think you know at this point that I'm a sap.

This was just so sweet--fitting for the challenge. Sometimes fluff comes across as mushy or cliche, but this doesn't. Not at all. It's so sweet and genuine and I loved every bit of it. You include such intimate details that I fall in love with the story immediately--the earthy scent of Remus, the way that Tonks' belly is silhouetted by the moon. Beautiful.

One of the saddest things that happened in the whole series was when Remus and Tonks died and left Teddy behind. I love how Teddy mirrors Harry in that way, and how they'll have a connection because of it, but it's SO SAD. Remus deserved to be happy, you know? After everything he went through, and he finally found love, and thenÖ *sigh* You use the sadness of this situation to your advantage by hinting at what will come, but not taking it too far. You let the circumstance speak for itself and that's why this story is so sad and why it's not cliche. It's just so simple. And I mean that in the BEST way possible.

I meant to post in the Blanket Fort earlier (but the webpage wasn't loading correctly so I couldn't) but your writing is just getting better and better with every challenge you take part in. So when you feel overwhelmed and wonder why you got yourself into this, just know that you are absolutely improving and that it will be SO WORTH IT in the end.

--Gina

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Review #5, by Veritaserum27 Twist

26th November 2015:
Hi there Kaitlin!

Iím dropping off a few Thanksgiving Reviews today and I really wanted to visit your AP. I told myself only fluff today, so I picked this one!

Let me start by saying - damn, girl - 64 stories! I have 11. I canít even imagine having this many - Iím so impressed!

Anyway, on to the proper review. This was really so, so sweet. I read your authorís note that it was a gift for Rose and that just makes it even sweeter. As a mom, I think you hit the emotions just right here. Thereís such a mix of anxiety, love, anticipation and the ďwhat-ifsĒ just donít ever stop. I was really happy to see the two of them share this moment - especially for Remus. He was so torn about being a father, and then when he died in the final battle, I just have in my head canon that he eventually came to terms with the fact that he deserved this happiness just as much as anyone.

Thanks so much for writing such a wonderful missing moment!

♥ Beth

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Review #6, by Felpata Lupin Twist

3rd November 2015:
Hi Kaitlin, dear!
Finally here for our swap! Please, please,
please, forgive me for the lateness...

So, I saw this story had only one review...
Plus, it is for the short and sweet
challenge... Plus it is Remus/Tonks... Well, I
just had to stop here!!! :D

And this was indeed sweet! I can't imagine the
sensation of a child growing inside you, but it
must be the most wonderful feeling ever!!! And
you wrote it so beautifully!!!

Of course, it also must be very scary,
especially in Tonks' case, with the war out
there. Especially when Remus was away, when she
was alone and abandoned, with the
responsibility of parenthood to take on her
own.

But fortunately Remus was sensitive enough to
come back! :) And it's interesting that the
child moved for the first time right when Remus
came back. It's nearly as if Teddy was waiting
for his Dad to be there! So sweet!!!

I also loved Tonks wondering whom the child
would take after. That passage was so sweet
too!

The closing left me with a bit of sadness,
because we know what's going to happen... But
everything about the story was just adorable!

Thank you for the swap and the lovely reading!
All my love,
Chiara

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Review #7, by Alarte Ascendare Twist

2nd November 2015:
Hi Kaitlin,

This is a really nice piece. You've communicated the joy of love in the midst of chaos nicely to the reader. This is just a simple moment, but you've created an entire story out of it.

When I was in school, my drama teacher told me that any simple moment can be taken to create an entire story. Even walking down the stairs when summoned to the Principal's office. You've done it excellently here!

There were no typos, no grammatical errors and you sentences were good too :D

I have to say though, the relationship felt a bit informal because of their conversation. It was good English but it wasn't the language of a couple, y'know? But then again, that could just be me :) But I felt that you could have made more intimate and romantic.

But overall, this is a lovely piece!

Good luck with the challenge :)

-Jen

Author's Response: Hey Jen!

Thanks for the review!

I'm so glad you could feel the joy of the moment. I was worried it might be too simple or hard for people to relate to.

Your drama teacher was right!

Yay for no typos! I'm the worst with them.

The reason I didn't include a lot of romantic language is because I don't really see Remus or Tonks as particularly romantic, flowery sorts of people, but I completely understand what you're saying. I'll have to think about it and see if I can convey a little more affection.

Thanks!

~Kaitlin


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