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Review #1, by May Premonitions

11th October 2015:
Really enjoying your story hope there is more to come

Author's Response: Thank you so much! :)

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Review #2, by Pixileanin September 1st

14th August 2015:
Hi there! Tag!

I am all for something different from the romance-centric Next Gen stories, so bravo for your idea! I thought this was a strong opening for both of your characters. I can see the differences between them, Scorpius' isolation, and Hugo's overbearing mother who argues a lot and puts pressure on both of her children to get it right.

It will be interesting to see the two of them at Hogwarts, and how they deal with their situations away from their families.

I am already curious as to what's keeping Scorpius up at night. I am also curious as to how Hugo escapes from his family pressures. You definitely have a great setup. This was a good read.


Author's Response: Thank you so much! This was such a lovely review and I really appreciate it. :) I love a good romance-heavy next gen plot as much as the next person, but I think stories that aren't centered on romance kind of get tossed aside and I really wanted to write one that could (hopefully) have some impact, so I'm really glad you enjoyed it.

Hugo and Scorpius are two of my favorite characters to work with, so it's been a dream writing them.

Thanks again! :)

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Review #3, by Roisin September 1st

11th August 2015:

Oh man, I don't think I've ever read a story featuring Scorpius and Hugo as MCs, that's so interesting! I wonder if/how they'll intersect.

As for concrits, the thing about Scorpius taking a portkey seemed a little over-justified to me. You could probably streamline that passage a bit to make it snappier.

But there was a real wit throughout that I really loved. Clever lines like the birds' 'unprecedented maneuver' or 'coffee as black as her soul.'

Stories about teenage isolation are always my jam, so I'm really glad to have found this. Great job with it!


Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's been awhile, (like over a year oh my) since I've done any editing so I completely see where you're coming from. Some of the sentences/passages are just a little bit funky.

I've never seen a Scorpius and Hugo story either, which is why I wanted to write this lol. I'm trying to bring this to a slow boil, but rest assured, they will interact!

Thanks again for stopping by :)

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Review #4, by teh tarik Life

9th August 2014:
Hey there! I saw that you updated this and couldn't resist coming back to read (even though there are one million other things which I should be doing!)

Albus seems like such a great friend! A bit insensitive, but aware enough to acknowledge his own faults. It's great to see that Scorpius has another great companion! And poor Hugo. :( His parents' arguments extending to their letters to him must have been awful, especially if they're sending him those every week or so. It's a constant reminder of the state of things at home, and he can't escape that, even when he's miles away at Hogwarts. Although both Scorpius and Hugo don't sound as though they know each other too well, I like that both their stories are still somehow connected through minor characters in between, like Rose and Albus. And I'm curious about Isabelle Langley's character and how you'll develop her!

Lovely chapter! Looking forward to an update!


Author's Response: Awh well I'm glad you came back! (And I know! For example - should I be writing right now? Probably not).

Oh Albus. I'm glad you saw him that way. I didn't want him to be a jerk, but he's 17 and sometimes he doesn't think before he speaks lol. Nobody's perfect - not even Harry Potter's son haha. Hugo is such a tormented soul right now. I just hope it isn't too much! And thanks! They will actually have contact and be more connected later, but I'm glad that you're still getting a feel of them being connected through Rose and Albus - that was my goal!

As for Isabelle, I'm thrilled that I get to play with her. I love OCs and so far she's really fun to write!

Thank you so much for the comment! :)


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Review #5, by Mada Life

7th August 2014:
I like this story. It's darker then a lot of the other next generation stories, which makes it different.

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you like it! :) I tried to put a lot of realism into it, which, of course, makes it a lot darker lol. But I'm really glad that's something you enjoy about it (:

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Review #6, by teh tarik A Beginning of Sorts

3rd August 2014:
Hello again!

I really enjoyed the dynamics of Scorpius and Rose's relationship. Well, friendship. I think they'd actually make quite a cheerless couple if they do somehow get together, thanks to Scorpius. But I think it's waaay more interesting that you've written them as friends, with Scorpius being especially reluctant to date anyone. And there's quite a bit of awkwardness between them as well, despite being best friends and all. I think you've written such a lovely subtle relationship between those two!

It's so sad to see Hugo struggling with the weight of his mother's expectations on him. The friendship between him and Lily is way more relaxed and natural than that between Rose and Scorpius. But I'm guessing it's because Lily isn't trying to date Hugo half the time. :P

Your character interactions are so fascinating! I hope you update this soon! (I know you said in the previous chapter that there won't be any main same-sex pairings, but I'm still kind of hoping for Scorpius/Hugo :P) Great work!


Author's Response: Thank you so much, again! I've kind of never been 100% on board with the whole ScoRose ship, so writing a Scorpius uninterested in any kind of romantic relationship with her has been really good for me haha. There's a lot of awkwardness though, you're right, and unfortunately it won't get better soon.

Hugo is like my sad, sweet baby. I just want to hug him sometimes! And Hermione, as much as I love her, with all the stress from her relationship with Ron, I really think she would put pressure on Hugo - who (like most 15 year olds) doesn't need it. And yeah! Lily and Hugo have probably the most relaxed/easy friendship in the whole story, primarily because Lily has no expectations of Hugo and she accepts him just the way he is.

Ahh, thank you! I've been working really hard on the characterization for this because the relationships are so complex. As for Scorpius/Hugo, I would honestly LOVE to write them together, but I just don't think it's going to happen with this story. (Who knows though? With this story - anything goes haha).

And I should be updating soon! (Depending on the queue of course). I have up to Chapter 5 written, it's just a matter of making sure it's presentable before I ship it off.

Thank you so much for both of your wonderful comments - they made my day!

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Review #7, by teh tarik September 1st

3rd August 2014:
Hey there!

This is such a unique story! I love the sense of atmosphere at the beginning, the repetition with the birds. And what interesting choice of characters! I can't wait to see what the ship will be, if there are any ships at all. But I think you've done a great job introducing both Scorpius and Hugo. I get the feeling that they're both lonely characters. Scorpius is completely alone, while Hugo is surrounded by family, yet feels no less lonely. It made me a little sad, actually, seeing the Weasley-Grangers so divided and generally unhappy.

I'm really curious to see how this story will turn out! Your writing is lovely, and this is a wonderful first chapter. :)


Author's Response: Oh wow thank you so much! This review was absolutely lovely to read. :)

Scorpius & Hugo have always been some of my favorite characters, so I was really excited to put them in a story together. And their plot-lines do cross (eventually - haha). I know though, I hate the tension but at the same time, I'm really trying to go for realism with this story.

Thank you so much again, I'm so happy you enjoyed it. :)

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