4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Storiesbooksandnovels 

20th June 2016:
Why does Snape resist? Can't wait to go on. Love it!!!

Author's Response: I wanted to show the fundamental difference between James and snape... how when confronted by an impulse, James take the chance to give in to it while Snape resists it.

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Review #2, by Meleessuhh 

5th May 2016:
Hi there! Sorry it took me a bit to get to your chapter, I started school again /:

I really loved this! I feel like we are started to get to the best parts of their childhood right before they are all full-blown teenagers. The Animagus bit was my favorite, did you research that or did you come up with it yourself? It definitely set the idea of how difficult it will be. I'm excited to see how long it'll take them to finish.

Oh no poor Adhara! What was he doing to her? I thought maybe giving her the Dark Mark but I'm not sure if he would have known that spell. Is she going to be okay? I am completely shipping her and Sirius though, so I hope that becomes a reality!

I love how Lily's 'hot headed' personality is starting to develop. She is coming out of her meek, sheltered Muggle-born phase and blossoming into the personality she is known by when she is older. You're doing an awesome job! The bit of magic that Severus showed her at the end was adorable, but I can't help but wonder when they're going to have their big fight.

This was a great chapter as always!! One of my favorites right now.

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Review #3, by victoria_anne 

12th April 2016:
(still waiting for her Adhara photoshoot)

Hello princess ♥

Ooh Animagus plans - here we go, wee! Those 32 steps though, whew! No thank you! I'm with Sirius on that one.

Hm, if I were to become an Animagus, I'd like to say I'd be a cat, but I'd probably be a donkey or something. I laugh like one.

Anyway.

I'm really loving James in this chapter. I think you capture his character just perfectly. He's coming off as rude, even to Lily, but that's literally just the way he is. He's one of those people who doesn't know when to stop talking or when he's hurting someone. So well done ♥

ADHARA! ♥

Nooo :( was Rigel putting a Dark Mark on her!? No no no.

Go Lily! Love her passion! Argh and the way she yelled all her frustrations at James! That was amazing to read!

Oh poor Marlene, James is so oblivious. I don't think she stands a chance :(

“Right, because you just usually wander around the castle in the dead of the night,” she said, rolling her eyes. - LOL because yes, yes he does.

I love Sirius and Adhara ♥

(...if you need me to pose with a Sirius Black during our photo shoot then, I mean, yeah I could probably do that, but, like, I'll check my diary...)

Aw and that contrast between James and Severus and their impulses! That is perfect.

Lovely chapter, Ysh, see you at the next one!

♥ B

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Review #4, by Unwritten Curse 

27th January 2016:
TEAM GOLD

THIS REVIEW MAY BE IN ALL CAPS BECAUSE I NEED TO EXPRESS MY FEELINGS.

AND MY FEELINGS ARE THAT THIS STORY IS FREAKING INCREDIBLE.

THE SCENE WHERE THEY'RE TALKING ABOUT ADHARA'S WOUND AND HOW IT MAY NEVER HEAL AND HOW THEY WANT HER KEPT AT HOGWARTS AND HOW IT MAY BE A PLOY TO KEEP THE MINISTRY FROM LOOKING BAD AND HOW EVERYONE IS KEEPING QUIET I JUST. I CAN'T. IT WAS BRILLIANTLY DONE. YOU ARE SO GOOD AT THIS WRITING THING.

Okay, I jumped ahead of myself. I went straight to this review box after reading that scene so that you could get my in-the-moment reaction. But I have to go back and make a comment about the Animagus scene. That was so clever! Did you do research to discover the 32 steps or did you make the up? Because they are so believable. I loved the idea of willing the DNA to morph.

But back to Adhara. I am so appalled that her own brother would curse her! She could… could she die from this? I really, really hope not.

Lily's speech about magic gave me goosebumps. How she hoped it would be the solution and now she's discovering there are dark motives afloat, and that magic can be twisted… I was riveted by that scene. Your dialogue is, once again, stunning. And your characters are evermore complex.

Which leads me to Sirius. I'm so glad he's talking to Adhara now. That he's giving her the benefit of the doubt. I think he understands now that she's like him. That she wants to be her own person and escape her family's dark legacy but she can't. I sincerely hope she gets better but I'm a bit worried that she won't, mainly because your other characters are all canon yet Adhara is not.

Looking forward to an update!

--Gina

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