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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by princesslily_36 

18th January 2016:
First Place *aaah!*

Plums! So proud of you, and definitely extremely well deserved!!!

YOU SUNK JILY *heartbreak* I can't believe you sunk Jily. Your A/N only made me feel slightly better. Just slightly, because you wrote it so damn well, my heart sank when you sank Jily.

I found myself feeling along with Lily. Especially the last line. It was just so sad :(

You have such a wonderful way with words! I loved how you described Lily's looks, by drawing out her personality and her features in such a wonderful blend. It just brought out the very essence of Lily Evans.

So I'm going to be super stubborn here and imagine all this to be pre-wedding jitters, because Sirius Black would burst in anytime and show her that she really did love James Potter, and that she was being an idiot :D

A well deserved challenge win, because you successfully sunk one of the most amazing ships in Potterverse! Congratulations Plums!

Loads of Love
Ysh

Author's Response: Hey, Ysh!

And so sorry. I sunk Jily! I went there. God knows why, but when I saw the challenge prompt, they immediately jumped to mind and I just had to see whether I could write that, you know? Apparently, I could :D

Haha, please do imagine it to be pre-wedding jitters if you must! I could totally imagine Sirius just breaking down the door, grabbing Lily and saying, "You are not getting cold feet now, Evans, not when I have had to have James go on and on and on about you for seven bloody years while trying to seem cool. YOU LOVE HIM. YOU KNOW IT."

And thank you so much for both the review and the congratulations :)

Plums xo


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Review #2, by dreamgazer220 

17th January 2016:
This was... wow.

In less than 2,000 words, you managed to convince me that Lily might not love James at all. I applaud your beautiful writing; I loved the descriptions of her wedding dress and the ivory, and tying it into the war was brilliant.

What I loved most was that her conflicted feelings for James had nothing to do with another guy - it was simply a reflection of whether or not she loved him. I could feel her panic in your writing. It was just so beautiful and your command of language was amazing.

Amazing job!

Jill

Author's Response: Hey,

First of all, thank you. I'm still not sure how I managed to wreck this ship since it's THE ship, but I'm glad I did. Sort of. Well, it's great to hear that you liked how I did it in any case (e.g. the dress, the lack of another man etc.) so once again, thank you, especially for saying 'I applaud your beautiful writing' and 'It was just so beautiful and your command of language was amazing.' You're such a sweetheart!

Plums xo


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Review #3, by cherry_pop94 

16th December 2015:
Hello! I'm here for the Ravenclaw gift tag!

Oh god. The beginning was just so pretty and beautiful and lovely and romantic. And I was just sitting here thinking to myself about how much I love wedding fics and how happy James and Lily would be, even if it was just for a short little while. But then you went and absolutely shattered my heart.

For a little while I was thinking that it was okay, just some pre-wedding jitters, but it doesn't totally seem like that. It seems like she really just doesn't love him and that was heartbreaking.

This really was a lovely and well written story though! Even though it did destroy Jily :(

Good luck on the challenge and happy holidays!

Stefanie

Author's Response: Hey,

SO SORRY IT TOOK ME SO LONG TO REPLY. I'm better than this usually, I promise! I am genuinely so sorry, especially because this review is SO wonderful. Thank you for that.

Um. . . I'm sorry for crushing your spirit? I'd say I didn't mean to, but I kinda did. Which is worse, really. :P But don't worry, it hurt me too to write them this way. I mean, I am Team Jily all the way.

Happy holidays.

Plums

xo


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Review #4, by The Basilisk 

13th December 2015:
As a sssnake there are certain shipsss that do not jell with me, Jilly is one of those shipsss. So I admit dessspite your love for the two charactersss being together I found it interesssting for Lily not to love Jamesss. It was particularly intriguing to sssee her realize thisss the night before her wedding.

I love how you painted her decision to wed be to be part of fear and being caught up in the war. I have persssonally felt that Lily may not have loved Jamesss at the ssstart but rather agreed to date him to get back and Sssnape. Then as she got to know Jamesss she may have learned to love him gradually.

Ssso while you sssunk your ship I enjoyed thisss writing exercissse immensssly. It was quite a treat to read and in a way oddly moving to sssee sssomthing ssso unique and different. To sssee Lily ssstill choose to wed dessspite her realization. The lassst line was quite poignant sssaying that she was going to marry the man of her dreamsss dessspite the dissscovery of her true feelingsss. Again, nicely done.

Author's Response: Hello Basilisk! It's been a while since we last saw each other. I have missed you a lot

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Review #5, by ravenclaw_princess 

7th December 2015:
Merry Christmas..."hands gift for Claw gift exchange"

While I would love to look at this as 'pre-wedding jitters', it most definitely isn't. The writing is just too powerful and emotionally distraught to be able to sign Lily's fears away to this. It's pretty heartbreaking :sob:

There is nothing quite like putting on a wedding dress to emphasise an impending marriage and bring about those feelings about whether or not you're making the right decision. I love your description of the dress and it adds weight to world that they are living in, with the war waging around them. But even through the dress is modest, when Lily wears it, it becomes a thing of beauty because her heart is full of kindness and love.

It sounds like Lily sought solace in James as a protector as the war raged around them. She didn't want to be alone, fearing what might happen and that she might not be able to experience love. James had always been trying to win her hand and Lily finally gave in, knowing that he would protect her with his life. She needed him, yes, relied on him always, but it didn't necessarily mean she loved him.

This piece is written exquisitely. The whole story flows well and there is so much emotion packed into it. I love the use of language and description. Right from the first line I fully drawn in.

My favourite line was this one "War was a tricky thing, destructive in so many ways. It chased after its victims with a whip, directing them toward their failures, even as they believed that they ran toward their salvations. It was sly and cunning. It figured out their flaws, their weaknesses, their tactics and lured them into traps styled as Trojan horses" I think it sums up well how the war drove Lily to James, where under ordinary circumstances, she wouldn't have ventured there.

The story is really heartbreaking. Even though Lily doesn't love James, she still needs him and will do all she can for him. Well done. This is a really well written and beautiful piece of art.

Jacqui

Author's Response: Hello! Merry Christmas to you too. I'll be heading over to your page soon to give you a gift too :)

Believe me, I didn't want to do this to James and Lily...but I had to. It was just too good an opportunity to miss albeit one that broke my heart too. You're right, it's definitely not just pre-wedding jitters, but who am I to stop readers from seeking comfort in possible explanations? :) Though it is my fault that they have to do it in the first place :P

You hit the nail on the head about the dress. I made it modest for a couple of reasons: one) because they were living in a war and I don't think they'd have time to spend it on a huge wedding, no matter how lovely it sounds, two) Lily's pretty frugal with her money in my headcanon since she's not rich and three) I just love the idea of her having a simple dress and then turning it into so much more just because of who she is. But yes, there's nothing like wearing a wedding dress, no matter how simple or extravagant it is, to really make you think about what you're actually doing.

And you've hit the nail on the head with Lily's feelings for James, too. She did seek him out for emotional protection. She did have strong feelings for him and still does, but she doesn't completely love him. And with no family to her name - dead parents and a sister that had disowned her - he became the only thing she had left.

Thank you for the wonderful review! I'm glad you enjoyed it and thought it was written well. I wrote the entire thing in one sitting and then edited it over the next couple of days so that really means a lot *blushes* :D

With love,

Plums

xo


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Review #6, by Jen25 

5th December 2015:
Okay,I know I'm not exactly supposed to give any praises until after the deadline (if this beauty ends up in the top three entries),but….WOW.

Author's Response: Thank you :)

xo


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