First of all, ‘ASBO Five’ and prof Newton in a Cat pyjamas?! GOLDEN
I like how you betray James’ moods and how he tries to feel towards Jenny; “Clarke” means “we’re good, we’re friends, trying my best to get a little flirting going” while “Jenelle” is “I’m angry/disappointed, trying to distant myself from you”. And Jenny knows this, which is nice way to show that there’s a lot of non-romantic history between Jenny and James too. And the way Jenny constantly gravitates towards him; she didn’t need to sit right next to James at the Pit, she didn’t need to sit in the same compartment even after she’s made it known she’s still mad at him and she most certainly didn’t need to sit right next to James in the Great Hall.
I can see why James is the Quidditch captain over Jenny, maybe she’s the better player but he’s far more mellow about it than her, lol. But I get it, it’s Jen’s dream to become a professional player while James has other ambitions (now I want a discussion between the two about that, does Jenny feel like James not taking Quidditch as serious as she does somehow hinders her, because he’s the captain? Maybe the current conflicts between them are enough though ;)
More mentions about the Riots— now I do want a discussion about them, what does Jenny really think about James being this glorified person in school? We’ve gotten a little bit of her feelings about it, but now I want more! What does James, Freddie and Luke think about it?
But J F C DOMINIQUE how can she be so blasé about everything, just because she doesn’t think Jenny is on to her? Either she’s completely unable to feel the tension or she just shakes it off, thinking Jenny can’t know anything. And then just... urrgh, I know this was coming but it’s still hard to read about. No one does this to their best friend. But at the same time I’m fascinated as to how little Dom really knows James, someone she’s known her entire life. And how does she come back from this? Dom has lost her best friend, two of her cousins that she’s can’t really avoid, the person she fancy probably doesn’t want anything to do with her now.
And omg, I always go in reviewing trying to keep it as short as possible so it’s not his enormous wall of text, but that’s what it ends up being anyway, lol. But that’s only because I think this story is so great and it gives me so much to think about that and things I want to say. It’s an amazing story :D
HAHAHAHHA isnt ASBO just so perfect for them.
Ah yes im so glad you picked up on that. Ive been subtly dropping it in in almost every chapter and at first it started off subconciously - probably the way it started with james - until i realised certain moods and tones would affect the way he addressed Jen. Which Jens noticed too - and sometimes James is aware, but mostly when he calls her Clarke, because she loved is. I dont think heÃ¢Â€Â™d realise that he was calling her Jenelle when hes not in the mood. Like he wouldnt be aware of it if that makes sense. But youve definitely hit the criteria nail on its head.
LOL right?? I think Longbottom had a pretty good idea about their different temperments. But also i think Longbottom thinks that James cares about Quidditch more than he does. Like he automatically assumed that James would aspire to be captain even though he didnÃ¢Â€Â™t. Oh and yeah, it probably is a lot more trouble for them but that doesnÃ¢Â€Â™t mean itÃ¢Â€Â™s not coming . itÃ¢Â€Â™s been a huge issue between them. Not sure if you can remember this but in JennyÃ¢Â€Â™s drunken conversation with Flora, she mentions it in passing so dismissively but the fact it even comes up at all when sheÃ¢Â€Â™s trying to dismiss her feelings for James. I mean. Come on. Lol.
OH GIRL ASK AND YOU SHALL RECEIVE! There is a lot more to this story then just love and I promise you itÃ¢Â€Â™s coming ;).
And yeah Dom is a piece of work seriously. SheÃ¢Â€Â™s genuinely trying to shake it off and fake it till she makes it. And to be fair Jenny genuinely didnÃ¢Â€Â™t know anything until just now basically so itÃ¢Â€Â™s been two or three days and while Dom can kind of tell somethings off, sheÃ¢Â€Â™s hidden her tracks so well it doesnÃ¢Â€Â™t occur to her it could actually be that Jenny knows. And depending on whether DomÃ¢Â€Â™s lie has effectively meant they canÃ¢Â€Â™t be together in a healthy relationship well just have to see how that dynamic would work.
Listen, i want your reviews to stay this long forever because you have no idea how much it makes my day to sit down with a cup of coffee or tea and just read these brilliant and long reviews. ItÃ¢Â€Â™s like reading a mini essay - which I canÃ¢Â€Â™t believe IÃ¢Â€Â™m using as analogy for something I actually like doing lol - but I LOVE IT SO MUCH PLEASE DONT STOP!
Thank you so much for reviewing! Love ya, P xxx