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Review:IrisAya says:
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First off, I forgot that I couldn't post two comments on the same chapter, shoot. So I have to post it here @.@ I need to stop rambling one day. So I'm marking this as a possible spoiler, fml because I can't delete the first one I posted and report this second half on the fifth chapter.

While I think Santiago would think it was an abrupt change, for her to interact positively with James. I canít help but think that after her self-proclaimed isolation, due to her feeling so ill and not wanting to talk about her illness, he might be even a bit happy that sheís not going back to that. Of course, I canít say for certain lol That blush was adorable and amusing, to me, though, once again imagining his face.

Of course, that ending had me watching my RSS feed consistently to see when the next chapter went into the queue. I made a comment earlier in the comment that Iíd hoped I would feel well enough to comment before this chapter and this is why, now.

Your A/N mentioned: ďPlease let me know what you think. I wasn't so sure about making her admit fancying James so soon, but oh well...Ē

Of course, I didnít consider something until Chapter 5 (which Iíll expand on later), but Iíll mention my thoughts prior to that. I didnít think it too early for Nautica to acknowledge that she possibly or did fancy him. Thereís a fair difference from admitting you might enjoy flirting with someone, his reactions, and his appearance versus wanting to date him or pursue him.

Then, after you entered Chapter 5 into the queue I reread and thought about Chapter 4 again. I considered that isolating yourself, to an extent, from your friends and having no real confidant/e regarding her difficulties with schooling and symptoms, could result in her being more likely to admit it to herself.

Especially with her recent interactions with him that show a bit of a newer side to him. Iím not saying that it drove her to think about it or think it only because of that and not her true feelings. Iím just thinking that it can aid the process along to coming to that point to consider something you mightíve not considered without it. I hope that made any sense at all.

Chapter 5ish:

Iím happy that her teammates and friends now know what is happening to Nautica. But Iím also saddened that it happened because of the incident at the quidditch match and not on her terms as she felt a bit pushed/forced into it, in a way.

I was hoping for a different answer from ďIím sorryĒ from many of her teammates, but itís an understanding immediate reaction of course.

I understand Santiagoís reaction and Nauticaís reaction, but I especially like that they were understanding of each otherís feelings and what backed them. Sounds like a healthy friendship, and she needs that sort of support now. I also enjoyed that she admitted that she could barely admit the cancer to herself, let alone anyone else.

After the last chapter, I was certain that James would visit Nautica after hours in the Hospital Wing and I enjoyed being correct on that thought. I was a bit thrown by the confession though.

It also feels very Nautica, with not wanting to burden her friends etc., to want him to leave because she wouldnít want to hurt James if anything happened. Breaks my heart for both James and Nautica, especially when James finds out (though I look forward to him possibly figuring out why she might have refused him then.)

Just, poor Nautica :( I hope it gets better at least, considering her friends now know and can help her out.

Thank you for updating and for writing this fic, of course! I look forward to the next update and hope that itís soon, but I completely understand how long it can take to write if needed.


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