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Review:Felpata Lupin says:
BETEE!!!
I thought I might leave you a review, while I'm at it! ;)

This was such a great chapter (I'm sure I already told you on Google docs, and anyway all your chapters are, but I guess you don't mind the repetition, do you?)

I especially loved your interpretation of Peter (I'm obsessed, yeah, and not even sorry). He was honestly perfect, the way he didn't know how to deal with Lily's mood changes (really, boys have the emotional range of a teaspoon... ahahah!), the way he wished someone else to be there in his place, the way his every action was lead by what the Others would have done. And above all, the way he felt guilty "betraying" Lily, but did it anyway because it would make him look good in his friends' eyes. That's so Peter. Don't you ever say you can't write him again, you write him wonderfully! ;)

Poor Lily, how hard must it be to feel so alone, to have everyone angry at you... I know it will be solved soon, but right now I feel so bad for her... And talking about how perfect your characterization of everyone is... this paragraph:
"Unanswered questions were never something Lily had been able to handle, the need to know burning in her head until it took over her every waking thought. The only way she knew she was going to get some sleep that night was to get herself some answers." This is just so Lily! I love it!

The opening scene with Severus and the closing scene in the Hospital Wing with James were both so perfect as well. Loved, loved, loved it all!

I need a new chapter... soon... hurry up and start writing, okay? :P

Love you so much, my little betee!
Snowball hug,
Chiara

Author's Response: Chii!

I am so sorry for responding super late to your review. I appreciate the time and thought that went into this.

I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter. You know how nervous I get when you have to read a Peter centric chapter of mine! You're the Peter expert here, and I'm just super joyed that you approve! I did imagine him to be awkward around people, and girls in particular because he was kind of a loner growing up as you saw.

I do feel bad for Lily, but it's kind of her fault here you know. I wanted to bring out that she's not as perfect as people make her out to be, and her actions while justified to her did tip off her friends. And Curious!Lily, always my headcanon. I kind of always figured Harry got his curiosity from Lily rather than James, you know.

This was a Lily-centric chapter, and I am glad that it all tied well together. Thank you so much for all the love on this one, and yes, you'll have the next chapter pretty soon!

Loads of love, snowball hugs and penguin kisses!!!
Ysh


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