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Another great chapter!

The first scene was highly significant. The way you highlighted the difference between Snape's behavior was amazing. I could totally feel his confusion and how he was trying to please both the Slytherins and Lily. Also, Lily using the word "Always" was such a great detail. :D It made me feel so bad!

The friendship of Lily and Severus is highly complicated because there is nothing that bonds them except the moments they have shared back at home when they were kids. Things are slowly changing here as they know more and more about the differences between them and you are capturing that in a realistic way. I always liked to think that Lily didn't abruptly break her long friendship with Snape only because he called her a mudblood. The end of their friendship was more of a process. That particular insult was the moment when Lily had had enough and decided to stop being friends with him. And as always, I loved how you used dialogue to do so.

The Marauder scenes were as lovely as usual. :D Your ability to write natural yet witty dialogue really enhances this story as friendship seems to be the core idea. Friendship deals with communication so writing about the Marauders works wonderfully for you. Well done!

I've started to like Adhara a lot. She is a relatable and complex character which is a great combination. I can't wait to read more about what happens in her life!

Great job overall! Keep writing! I'll be back for more soon. :)


Author's Response: Hello Ashwini!

I am so sorry for the delay in my response to your review.

Snape is always a challenge to write because he's so complex and grey. I am glad you noticed what I was trying to bring out about him.

It is kind of sad that a lot of childhood friendships just fade out because they just grow into different people, and grow out of the friendship. I want to show the rift between Lily and Severus, but also make sure that the readers know she was really attached to him despite how cold she must have sounded post-mudblood incident. I'm glad the dialogues are working, they're my boggest worry since I'm not a native English speaker. I'm sure you can relate!

Marauders on the contrary are so much fun to write. I hang around a group of boys and I like to observe their dynamics and incorporate certain aspects of that in my story. I am finding a challenge to give some attention to Peter though, because I don't really want to ignore him like other fics do, but I'm not particularly inspired to write about him also, if you get my drift! Sometimes I wonder if I should have stuck to a single PoV story.

Adhara is an enigma, even to me. She rebels even when I write her. I have a scene planned for her and she just refuses to cooperate and tells me who she is rather than me telling her!

I'm so glad you like it so far, and I'm sorry for the late response!!


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