|Review:||Felpata Lupin says:|
Hello, little betee!!! *wub*
I never left you my notes on this, but I did tell you how much I adored the story, so now it's time to give you some proper feedback... (I'll leave my thoughts as I read, so forgive me if this will come out a bit confusing...)
So first, the Platform scene was adorable! I loved how you wrote Molly, scolding Bill and getting emotional over Charlie leaving for the first time. And the little reference to Ginny, too... so sweet!
And Charlie meeting "Just Tonks" for the first time is the funniest and cutest thing ever! I love how you wrote her, with her characteristical clumsiness and her equally characteristical pride. Great characterization! Loved it!
Yay! Hufflepuff pride! I love that she changed her hair colour to yellow to celebrate her house! Go, Hufflepuff!!! (sorry... I'll stop it now...)
Loved the Mandrakes' scene as well. Their friendship is adorable, and I agree with Charlie, Tonks is so much fun! Also, I already told you, but I love how you structured the story, breaking it in small sections and narrating the evolvment of their relationship through single moments in time. And I love how each scene ends with a thought of Charlie describing Tonks. It's super adorable!
Ah, the third year scene! I loved the teasing there! And the Hufflepuff hair again! :P Really, you write their friendship wondefully!
Ah, no... of course you don't fancy Tonks... who would ever think of something that absurd? *rolls eyes at Charlie's denial* "He decided that McCain was an idiot, and if Tonks liked him, she was one too." Ahahah! Someone's jealous... :P
And aww... the first kiss... I love how you wrote that scene, the playful teasing, and then Charlie surrending to the impulse (just like the Gryfindor he is) and the kiss in itself... so lovely! But she thinks it's bad, because they are friends, and because they are both in a relationship with other people... Aww, it's so sad... but so very believable, too.
Ah, you can't go back to friendship like that, it doesn't work that way... poor Charlie...
Ah, Charlie... *shakes head* It's most definitely not Quidditch. I'd call it jealousy. And of course, he managed to ruin everything... I'm feeling so bad for him... And his thoughts in the second part of fifth year are also so true and relatable... Poor Charlie...
Sixth year was great, too! There are still tensions between them, obviously, but they decide to give each other another chance. And it makes me so happy! And I love their way of understanding each other, and I love how you built all the story, because it's just so true!
Ah, seventh year made me so sad. They are together, but they are growing up too. They will soon be out of school and they need to make decisions for their future, and they might be separated by their carrier choices... And Charlie had hidden from her his will to move to Romania... I can see that she would get angry, but it still makes me sad...
And the scene of the last day makes me even more sad... He'd planned to propose to her... Poor Charlie... I want to cry... It's so unfair... But I guess life works that way, doesn't it?
And the epilogue. You wrote that last scene so beautifully... And for a moment you actually made me resent Remus for getting between them. But I can't stay angry at Remus for long, you know it... :P
“When the occasion calls for it, you can be pragmatic like a Ravenclaw, brave like a Gryffindor, determined like a Slytherin… but your best and most wonderful quality is that you can hope like a Hufflepuff. You always remain positive, even at the worst of times. That’s what ties all your other qualities together. You need to summon your inner badger, and keep going at it. No bloke is going to be able to say no to you for long. And I’m not just talking about that hot body of yours”
This is the most beautiful expression of love that could come from Charlie! And it really did capture the essence of a Hufflepuff! I love it, so much!
This is such a wonderful story, my adorable little Betee!!! Thank you for sharing it!
All the love in the world,