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Review:LadyL8 says:
Hello Again, June!

Wow. This episode type of writing really works for you. You do it so well. It doesn’t feel like randoms jumps in time, but like each episode have a meaning, they all add something to the whole story. That’s really what I wish to see in stories with a structure like this, and you’ve done it in both your chapters, so I’ve really started liking this way of writing already. It’s creative and really good!

I have to say you kind of broke my heart with this story. Like you, I was rooting for the two of them. It really felt like they’d be a great couple, but then you twisted the whole thing around when we finally got to see his view on the same scenes we’d already seen from her POV. I could really feel Bianca’s pain, and while I feel sorry for Theodore too, because he’s obviously having deep issues himself, it doesn’t excuse the way he treated her.

But that twist, that switch in POV, it was so effective, so powerful. It kind of reminded me of the book «Gone Girl» by Gillian Flynn, because that one too shows that every story has two sides. Sometimes they are somewhat the same, but other times they are completely different. Bianca falls in love with Theodore, so she doesn’t really see the signs of this not being a good relationship until she’s in too deep. It’s sad to see, but very believable. And so creative. You really surprised me, even though I obviously knew they wouldn’t end up together because this story is for the «I don’t love you» Challenge. Wow. That really was good! Keep up the good work, and I really hope to come back to read more of this in the future!

Lots of Love

Lotte

Author's Response: Thank you again for the multiple reviews!

Sometimes, I tell myself not to write the way I do, but it's just a style that I'm so used to writing that it comes out that way.

Thankfully, I was able to deliver the story well. Theodore's a jerk. Hahahaha. He should've really thought more about his actions. *shakes head*

Team Bianca, all the way. XD

I've never read Gone Girl (though I do, one day). It's interesting to hear that my story has some similarity in structure.

June


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