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Review:TearsIMustConceal says:
Hi Alec!

I have only just noticed recently that you left me a review request and I never got around to doing it for you! I am so sorry, and I know this does not make up for it, here is your review. Again, I really do apologise for my lateness!

So because I haven't read chapters 1-8, with you asking me to concentrate solely on this, I can't comment too much on the plot of the story on a whole but I think your idea, the Weasley's on holiday/vacation is pretty original and something I haven't seen before so points for originality! The humour is good, the banter between the characters flows well and I found myself smiling whilst reading it so I think you did a good job! Characterisation wise, because the chapter is so dialogue heavy not overloaded but there is a substantial amount of it within the chapter, it's a little difficult figuring out who said what but saying that, I think I managed to work out who said what by they way they said so it's not too much of an issue but maybe you could make it a little clearer in parts? Just so we know who is making us laugh, etc.

On the whole, I really enjoyed the chapter, the changing of POVs was a little abrupt in places and I wasn't sure about the Harry POV in the middle of it all but I am sensing that scene has been building up in the earlier chapters? Because the conversation didn't seem random enough for me to think you just put it in the middle of the story. But aside from that, I loved the pace, it flowed quite well, aside from a few parts and I do think the plot of the chapter was interesting and it certainly made me want to read more!

Again, I am sorry for the delayed review.

-Vicki

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