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Review:carry on with your knitting says:
Hey Kaitlin! :)

I'm here for another review swap!

This was definitely different from anything I've ever read here before, I would never think to write from a muggle perspective, but it's brilliant! I think you describe Roberts 'fear of the unknown' really well! and loved that you have him checking for wires before admitting to himself that she was actually levitating! Mugs are so ignorant! ;)

The pace was something that struck me as particularly great. It was quick which really gave a sense of Roberts panic and the general panic of the whole situation! Pu the pace slowed when he was finally accepting that he would die, which was so impressive! :)

I loved the last line 'darkness overtook him' because it gives a sense of hope and makes that actually ending not as dark as it is to start with. :)

I loved it! Another great One-Shot! Keep up the amazing writing :)

Katie :)

Author's Response: Hey Katie!

Yeah. I haven't really done much from a Muggle perspective either, but that was the requirement for this challenge. I'm really glad too, because it caused me to push in a direction I might not have gone otherwise.

I think most of us would react similarly when seeing something we don't understand happening.

Oh! I'm thrilled about your comments on the pace. Whenever I write a short one-shot, I worry that it will seem to rush and this one was particularly sparse. I'm glad it worked out okay.

I tried to leave the ending up to the reader. It doesn't say that he dies explicitly, so there's the possibility that the police or emergency services might've rescued him from the river.

Thanks so much for the swap!


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