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Review:marissa lily potter says:
Hiya!

This was really fun to read! I love stories where Rose and Scorpius have an unfathomable amount of tension between them. Sometimes, it gets a little ridiculous and super cliche but it didn't feel like that at all here! I think the fact that you set the scene on the Quidditch pitch to start off, making the tension and rivalry more justifiable was a great thing to do! It really made me excited and nervous and antsy reading because not only did I want to read more about Rose and Scorpius, but I also wanted to read about how the game would end!

You have an amazing foundation for a plot here. There's so much that you could do with this. You've set the beginning scene up beautifully and I feel like there are a million different ways you can go with the story and they would all fit. This chapter was vague enough to let the readers go on and think of the future for themselves but also descriptive enough to really set a good foundation!

I am very impressed at how descriptive you are. I really felt like I was watching the game. When Rose squinted, I felt myself squinting as if I was really in the thick of it all. xD It makes me so happy when an author has such a strong effect on me as a reader. I love it when I'm able to get excited about a story and feel like I'm a part of it. That's what you did for me here and I'm very grateful for it. You really do have a way with words because not only did you excel at grabbing my attention but you kept it.

You had a very good flow to this chapter! It was very easy to believe everything that was happening and when the scenes changed, I didn't feel like they were abrupt at all! The transitions were smooth and I couldn't even feel that they were happening, which was the best part! One moment I felt like I was still at the beginning of the chapter and the next, James is yelling at Rose and right after that, Albus is trying to distract her.

Speaking of Albus, he's such a funny character. Albus is probably one of my favourites in the next generation era to read about. He's always so interesting because there are SO many different takes on him. I'm very happy with the way you've set him up so far! To be honest, I like all the characters you've introduced so far. They're unique but I can see why they would get along with the people they do get along with. They're similar to one another but their own people at the same time. And they're definitely very relatable!

Winning a game can make people do crazy things. xD I could definitely see all of this happening for real! I really did enjoy reading this chapter and am glad I got a chance to read it. I ♥ Next Gen and you've done them justice! Great work! ^.^

~Marissa

Author's Response: Naw, thanks Marissa!

Now I'm grinning like a fool at work and my colleagues are shooting me funny looks. lol.

Thanks so much for leaving such a lovely review. I feel all warm and fuzzy now. I've tried my hand at Scorose in the past on another site, (the fic will soon be posted here too) but I wanted to do a different take on them this time so it's nice to hear that so far it's engaging and interesting a likable.

Thanks a bundle for reviewing for me.

xx-Ellie


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