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Review:Lululuna says:
Hello! :) I'm here from Day 4 of the 12 Days of Reviewing Challenge on the forums!

I really liked this chapter and it makes me sad that your story hasn't gotten more reviews! I'm not familiar with the series you crossed HP with but so far I really like what you have and the mentions of the Muggle organizations only make the story more intriguing. I love stories which focus on Harry's career as an Auror and the dynamics of how the Auror department might work, and you did a really good job here of showing how Harry's job would involve a lot of stress and dealing with annoying employees. :P

The story of how Julius, Robert and Amy botched the operation was great and made me laugh. I'm excited to see more of these three as they seem like hilarious characters and I enjoyed watching Harry make them squirm. I laughed at how Harry decided Amy was from then on his favourite since she admitted they made a mistake, and how he compared the three to Hermione and Draco and other people he knew.

The Manchester debacle sounds very intriguing, and I'm curious to find out more about what's going on. The Death Eaters joining forces with Muggle terrorists is a really original and creative idea, and one that I think had a lot of potential. It makes sense how then both wizards and Muggles would need to cooperate to fight the threat as well.

The little details about the quill and Kingsley made me laugh as well, I loved how Harry said it was a Weasley product and he therefore couldn't do anything. :P I feel that with crossovers it's very important to maintain a genuine feel of the Potterverse, and you've definitely done that so far. Harry seems quite well in character as well, I enjoyed reading him and he seems to still have some of the frustration that he felt when being a leader in the books, and some of the self-doubt and sense of expectation which I imagine he would still have even after years of being a successful Auror.

This was a great and very well written first chapter, I'll try to drop by and give you another review sometime in the future! Well done! :)

Author's Response: First off, thank you very much for reviewing. It was quite a pleasant surprise to find such a lengthy one waiting for me. Glad to hear you think I wrote Harry well; it's a bit of a challenge doing a grown-up Harry, since we know so little about his life after the war.
It's nice to hear you enjoyed the story, it really is, and thank you for taking the time to review.


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