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Review:rozen_maiden says:
Mahalia here with your RR!

I'm really not sure what I want to say here. This is opening chapter had my complete attention. You have an abosolutely lovely narrating style, that's easy to read and understand. You reveal little snippets of your OC's personality and features without going into droll detail. Honestly, the whole chapter was just perfect. I didn't have to go back and read anything. You have that Hogwarts style to your writing, and the flow - I could honestly rave all day about how well your story flowed.

Your OC herself is instantly likable and vulnerable, and I felt a strange tug in my chest when I read she was a Muggleborn Slytherin. That's so sad! And you wrote it so well - she isn't a perfect, Mary-Sue, and she has suffered from being in Slytherin. I love that Snape and Malfoy aren't her biggest fans, and it's good that you kept to that canon.

I don't really have much more to say that doesn't just constantly involve how wonderful you write. I'm reading the next chapter right now! This was a great start :)

- Mahalia

Author's Response: Hello! Thanks so much for your amazing review! I'm so happy to hear you're enjoying it so far! :D

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