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Review:MadiMalfoy says:
Hello! :)

So this is actually the first Draco/OC I've really ever read, as Draco/Hermione is my OTP. But no worries, I like this one a lot so far! :)

Your characterization of Draco so far is wonderful! I've always imagined him wanting to break under all the pressure he's under, and the scene at the end really epitomizes that. Emmaleigh Ross is your OC so I can really only say good things about her! She seems very developed, with a good persona and a great, intellectual mind like Hermione's. If anything, I'd say you just wrote the Slytherin Hermione. :) So she is definitely not 'bland' at all!

The narration is key to keep the plot moving, and you don't disappoint in this opening chapter. You give us enough background information to flesh out your character and her situation, and still manage to move it along in the present day as well, something that some authors can have a tough time with. I didn't notice any grammar/spelling errors at all either, so wonderful job on that!!

A muggleborn Slytherin? Are you kidding me?? How is that NOT intriguing? I think if you wanted more reads/reviews, you could hint at that in the summary if you wanted--it's definitely something not really done (besides Hermione in Slytherin) so it's a fantastic idea! And, you made it a Deathly Hallows subplot too, even better!! The one discrepancy is that Draco didn't return to school during this year because the Dark Lord was using his manor, etc etc so he had to stay home. However, you make it work to your advantage.

Overall, a superb start! Please feel free to re-request! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your lovely review!

I must admit that Draco/Hermione is a guilty pleasure of mine (which makes me the worst Ron/Hermione shipper ever, but oh well.) :p

I'm thrilled to hear you're enjoying the story so far, and that it was intriguing enough to hold your interest despite it not being about your favorite pairing. Regarding Draco not going to school, I've personally always liked to think he did return but happened to be home for the Easter holidays when the trio was brought there, but that's what I love about HP - so much is open for interpretation. :D

Thanks again for the review!


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