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Review:Lady of Tears says:
I'm here with your review!

Right off the bat, I'm impressed with your use of first-person. I think you have a great balance of being inside Emmaleigh's head: there's not an overabundance of thought, but just the right amount of inner reflection. I especially liked the part about her mother. I found her to be an interesting character with depth and dimension.

In that same vein, I thought your overall characterization was good. I liked Snape most of all; his jeers were right on target and made me smile. I enjoyed the way you had all the characters interacting with each other.

I think the plot is a solid, and it made me want to keep reading, just because I wanted to find out how all the pieces are going to fit together. I think it's a really unique idea, a muggleborn Slytherin at this particular time. I haven't read a story quite like it.

Things I want to see more of: more memories from the past, especially things to solidify Emmaleigh's memories with the trio, to help her fit more naturally into their world. Being in first person you have a lot of room to interject things.

Definitely continue! It was a great read, and something new for me.

Lady of Tears

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the wonderful review!

It's good to hear that Emmaleigh appears well-rounded so far! Writing OCs can be tricky because it's so easy to fall into Mary Sue territory. :p I really hope I can continue to keep her interesting throughout the story. I'm also really glad to hear you liked Snape's characterization! He's always been a tricky one for me to write.

And yes, more reflections of the past are coming. :) Like most writers, I try not to give everything away right off the bat, but I'm afraid I have a rather nasty habit of withholding too much, haha. It's definitely something I'm trying to work on.

Again, thank you so much! If you do carry on reading, I do hope you continue to enjoy it. :)

Cheers!


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