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Review:BookDinosaur says:
Hello! -BookDinosaur- here, please forgive me for this criminally late review. Feel free to throw small inanimate objects at me. Really.

I really like your characterisation of Isobel, she seems like a really believable, realistic character. I would like to know how she became a Gryffindor though, especially if she acts so much like a Slytherin. I also like James as a character, he's very likeable and I especially like how he's pursuing Isobel for a reason, rather than just mindlessly asking her out, like I've seen in many cliche stories. However, he does seem very similar to James I, so I'd just caution against that.

My main gripe with this story is how Isobel was so against getting to know James, but she happily becomes friends with Dom. I know it's explained in the story, but it still doesn't quite make sense to me. Also, I saw a couple of typos throughout the story, so I'd recommend looking into a beta.

I liked how you put in the flashback in, it didn't interrupt the flow at all. The only CC have for you there is that Isobel sounds really young for eleven, almost too young to be believed.

All in all I really liked this as an opening chapter, it was great. :)

Author's Response: Okay. Hi. And no, I'm not planning on any physical harm. :) LOL

So, Isobel. There is a lot more to Isobel and you'll soon find out why she is a Gryffindor once I'm done being lazy and get back to writing.
James. Yess. That is one of my major concerns. For James to be true to his identity rather than that of his grandfathers. However that, will also develop more as the story unfolds. He wont be similar to James I, I assure you. :)
Really? The flashback sounds too young. Oh on. I wanted to be careful with that because in my head I was okay with her sounding younger instead of older than 11. :P
All and all,
Thank you for your review. They are always appreciated. :D
Xx


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