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Review:MadiMalfoy says:
Hello again! :)

Yay, a longer chapter! I quite liked it, what with the pranking Gryffindors on the Slytherin Quidditch team! I feel like that competition would never die out, just because that's how it always has been and always will be! :)

Using Isobel as the narrator was a great idea, and I'm glad you didn't change from person to person or use third person. It allows for a more personal connection to the piece and helps us understand your original character better, kind of learn about her thought process and feelings towards the others she interacts with.

Just a few grammar/spelling errors that interrupted the consistency, but those can be fixed with a proofreading. :) Other than that, there really isn't much for me to say for this chapter besides that the pranks were stellar and the bets are totally typical of them!

Great job, please re-request for future chapters! :)
~MadiMalfoy xx

Author's Response: Hi. :D
Chapter three will be much longer and so is taking time to write. I personally thought of this chapter as quite a filler, and then I gave it that cliffhanger ending. It felt weird writing a filler second chapter. And of course. The bets were typical. So yeah. :P
Yes! The grammar. Must get in the habit of proof reading!
THANK YOU ONCE AGAIN. :D
-Kate. Xx


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