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Review:MadiMalfoy says:
Hey there! :) Here's your requested review!

Characterization: I think you've characterized James II very well! He's a popular prankster with a bunch of girls with immature crushes on him but really only likes one girl. Very canonical, so good job!! Since Isobel, and Edward are your OC's I won't say much, except that I really like them! There's a lot of potential for even better character development, so take that opportunity!

As far as flow goes, it works pretty well. The flashbacks aren't just thrown it, there's a sense of order and importance to them. The only thing really interrupting the flow is the grammar and spelling errors you have here and there. I think with a quick proofreading you could find those and fix them no problem!

As a whole, a great opening chapter! Please feel free to re-request for future chapters! :)
~MadiMalfoy xx

Author's Response: You know that rush of excitement when you see an increment in the number of reviews. Yeah that feeling. :D. Its aweeesooomme!

I'm glad you liked James. I want him to be like-able. :P. And about Isobel and Ed, there's a lot more to them, you'll find out more and more about them as the story proceeds.
Ah! Proof reading. Need to stop being lazy and proof read! I would love to re-request. :D
THANK YOU!
Kate. :D


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