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Review:HorseMad99 says:
Hi, it's your requested reviewer.
Sorry this review is so late, as I mentioned on the thread I have had an important exam that I needed to study for but I am finally her (at last!)
'Her wand (or so she claimed)' the first thing I thought of was it when Umbridge was interviewing all of the muggleborns and asking them who they had stolen their wands from and that was why the narrating character added '(or so she claimed)'
I really like the repetition of 'Twist. Turn. Stop. Observe. Repeat' it just worked really well and added to the tense/creepy atmosphere.
'Have you ever had that satisfaction? When you see pieces shatter, and you know that you have caused it.' I don't know why but I just love this quote, it was certainly un-nerving but still really good.
I really liked how the other character demanded to have her wand back despite all that was happening and how she seemed in no position to ask for such a thing but she did anyway.
'Manor' when you mentioned this it immediately made me think is might be Bellatrix and Hermione bu then the ending proved me wrong.
I really liked the repetition at the end of 'Have you ever had the satisfaction? When you see pieces shatter, and you know that you have caused it' I think it ended it really well.
Okay, era defining. So it wasn't too clear which era it was from but seeing as it was a one off chapter and we don't even find out who the characters are I don't think it is all too important. I think it actually works really well as being so unknown.
I think you could have made more of the ending in the way that you had to mention in the authors note what happened, instead you could have explained it a little more in the story.
However I did really like it especially not knowing who the characters were. It kept me guessing and really made me think about it so well done.
I don't think it is all to vital that the era is not crystal clear though I think it will become clearer if you make more of the end.
I really liked this so feel free to request a review for another story!
10/10
Beth :)

Author's Response: Heey. Thank you for you review. I'm glad you liked it and enjoyed the quotes that I was hoping the readers would enjoy. I would love for you to give me more reviews. Once I start writing again of course,
Thank you again :D
Xx
-Kate


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