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Review:MadiMalfoy says:
Hello! Here with your requested review :)

Since your biggest concern was about defining an era, I'll start with that. I feel that it's rather confusing at first because there isn't much mention of the outside world. But then, when you mention the Dark Lord, it narrows it down to either the Marauders era or the Hogwarts era. At first when he goes to the cell and there is a mudblood girl, I thought it was going to be a Draco/Hermione bit, but guess not. :P I think a way for you to specify would be to use more details in describing the character (the one serving the Dark Lord) to help us figure it out easier. You could also just say, hey, this is so and so and he's in such and such place.

Now for the basics. You don't really have many grammar/spelling errors, which is always a good thing. One I found was that "queue" should be "cue" instead. You have quite the plot bunny though, I didn't expect it to end the way it did. I think some more description overall wouldn't be a bad idea, but it's all up to you. It works fairly well like it is, kind of bare-boned, much like the plot itself.

Overall, a very interesting one-shot. Definitely more outside my comfort zone, but I liked it none-the-less. :) xx

Author's Response: First off. Thank you for your review. :D
Haha. No. I never planned this to be a Draco/Hermione. I just created the two characters and the situation randomly. But I like what you have pointed out. To describe the male character more, that is. For a clearer picture of what time era the situation is placed in. And I'll make the corrections needed.
Thank you again. :)

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