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Review:-BookDinosaur- says:
Hey, -BookDinosaur- here with your requested review!

I really liked this one-shot. I think that your characterisation was very good, I really felt the sadism and the hatred of Mudbloods that the narrator displayed.

I liked the ending of the story-by repeating the quote made near the beginning, you made the story come full circle and gave it a feeling of completion.

I enjoyed the irony towards the end as well, where the narrator hunting the woman is actually chasing his own death.

Your writing was gripping and made me want to read on, until I'd found everything out. You wrote the chilling, mysterious atmosphere very well.

My CC for you would be grammar-I spotted a couple of mistakes that disrupted the flow of the story, which was otherwise fine. Just an example:
'her lips parted as her breathing came out unsteady. . '
I think that's meant to be unsteadily, and the two dots didn't make much sense either. I think it's either meant to be a full stop or an ellipse.

Overall, a brilliant one-shot that left me wanting to read more.

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
Haha. Yes. I never realise the sort of grammatical mistakes I make. I'll make the corrections.
Xx


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