Awww, I cried when I read this! Of course he would be bitter! Report Review
That, my friend, was AWESOME.
At first, I was kind of like, "oh, great, Snape's daughter. pfft." but the emotion in the piece changed my mind enough for me to like it.
The only things I would change are the "end of flashback" things, which I kind of thought ruined the flow of the story--and in one place, Alice's name changes to Ashley.
Other than that, great job!Author's Response: Awww, thanks!
About the flashback thingy... Yeah, I know it's a mood killer, I just didn't want the reader to be confused!
And the name change... OMG. I can't believe I did that! Jeeeesus =/
Thanks so much! Report Review
that was really good (don't worry iam not goingto go on about how i lovedavery wrd) it made me cry and trust me hardly anything makes me cry!! keep it up Author's Response: Aww, that makes me feel so special... Thanks! Report Review
It was so sad! Tears in the eyes over here...Author's Response: Awww, thanks, sweety! Report Review
It was a good story, but I don't think the references to God ever work in Harry Potter fan fics. Also some of the vocabulary didn't quite fit, like 'ain't' and 'man' and 'ah'. Heck I sound picky, sorry, because it is actually a really good idea for a fan fic and it's been well executed, so thumbs up.Author's Response: OK, thanks, and you're not picky at all. Report Review
i'm cryin ovr hereAuthor's Response: lol thanks! Report Review
Heart-wrenching. Well done!Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
Oh, hun that was so good! Really sad and good!Author's Response: Thank you!!!!!!!! Report Review
Such a sad story. It's almost the sort of story that would have been better spread out into more chapters so that you could learn a bit more about the characters, but this was alright as well. It was a pleasure to read. Keep writing!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I thought of it as a story, but well, it was quite good as a one-shot. Report Review
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