You've struck my intrust. Please post soon. Author's Response: Thank you i love this story too but don't know what to say next Report Review
Well...I didn't mean it like that, everyone makes mistakes, I'm jusy pointing out little things you can improve, that's all.Author's Response: i know i was being sacastic.
ACK! Cliffhanger!!!!!!! NOOOO!!!!!!! Kay, you are so getting better in your writing, but I caught a few spelling errors (you spelled CHAMPAGNE wrong) and I noticed a couple of dialouge errors, but keep at it and PLEASE update!!!Author's Response: sorry im not miss perfect but thanks
Are you dead, Kay?? UPDATE PLEASE!~! And I'll see you Monday! Author's Response: hum... let me check... pulse is good...im breathing..yep i think im alive :) Report Review
HAHA!!!! I am triumphant!!! LOL, I love this chappy, but no keeping me waiting Kay!Author's Response: i'll try not to thanx Report Review
Gah! Can't get enough of it!! Don't keep me waiting Kay!! And how...I know I've already told you, but how could you do that to Hermione, Ron and...ME!!!!! LOL.Author's Response: HEHE very funny but like ive said a million times just keep reading as i post them. Report Review
I liked it alot it was very very good on a scale of 1-10 i give it a 10Author's Response: thanx
Gah! The sentences didn't work, pay them no mind, I'll explain later!! Great story again, hope ya get more reviews!!=)Author's Response: thanx Report Review
Kaylee, kaylee, kaylee, I have to say you amaze me again!! Even though you have already read it to me, I didn;t know about the last part!!! I have on etip for you, that even I have a hard time remembering, but it helps:
Space out the sentences, for example.
"Ok, you got something I can write with” said Ron searching his empty pockets in hope of finding something.
“Yeh, here” said Hermione handing him a pad of paper and pen and when she did their fingers touched and in Hermione’s mind all the good memories she had had with Ron came flooding out of the deepest darkest parts of her brain because she had shoved them way back when she left five years ago.
"Are you going?" Selena asked.
"Yeah", Harry replied, "are you?"
"Maybe she should!" Ginny interrupted.
Se where I'm goin with this?? It helps, trust me.
Great job though, it's really, really awesome!! Oh, and have fun in Portland, but I'll make sure you catch up on writing when you get back!!=)
Author's Response: thanx Report Review
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