Well this is very sad but, well she was really an IDIOT, I must say. She's a WITCH! And she couldn't handle a muggle boy... Sirius is very nice, although can't quite see him in this sitiuation. But it's an example. Though your writting is very good. Especially when written to fit something.

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hi, i'm not sure if this is the right place to write this...
but i am in the midst of planning and slowly beginning to write a story...

i was wondering if it must reference the past as it is something that happens to the girl as she grows up, and she is one of the main characters that the story revolves around...
it will not be of graphic nature, just when she is confronted and cornered, and the scene will skip to her emotions and feelings after wards when she is alone.would that violate any rules?

thank-you for the many tutorials by the way, it's helped me realize what is and what isn't appropriate.

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I have a question: I was thinking about writing this story about how a girl gets raped by her boyfriend. I wouldn't go into specific details, but would that type of story be okay?

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wow that was kinda depressing but it helped me with my story thats for sure

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This was so sweet ad sad I felt like killing Bret. Even though he's a fictional character. I love Sirius's sweet, sensitive side. And I felt so bad for Dorcas. And when she called herself a Mudblood, I don't think she should have said that. Well, this was sad and I felt like crying while I read it. It's wonderful.

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Good example but I still have one question...I am currently working on a story in which the main character (a female) has fallen madly in love with Harry. They've been going out for a while and Harry wants to become more...initmate...but she is uneasy about the fact because when she was younger (like age 15/16) she was violently raped by a man (character is to be detemined) who she thought she loved. She has nightmares about it and eventually tells Harry. The nightmares will gradually become more graphic each time she has them...I was wondering if having slightly graphic details in her nightmare's would be alright, along with the ratings of Mature, Scences of Strong Violence/Sexual Nature, etc... Please let me know...Thanks much and your example was truly entertaining to read... :-D

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Brilliantly written, i've got to say that is one of the best things i've read.

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Oh my god. ='( Made me so touched.

Here I was, checking if my scenes were allowed. XD
Whoever the writer is, this made me cry! Kudos!

10.10

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i know it was just meant to be an example for the guidelines, but it was fantastically written, i only aspire to be as good of a writer as the author of this. very very good example of a story with rape/abuse

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I know that this is just an example, but I think that it is absolutely amazing. Sad and touching, you use just the right amount of description...really well written. Great job!
Also, I loved this line, "Anger burned inside Sirius. He’d find him, he’d make him pay in ways only a wizard could. The boy wouldn’t know what hit him and he’d never know who to tell if an unforgivable curse had been used on him. Something inside him spoke sharply in his mind. This isn’t about you, Sirius. This isn’t about how you feel."
It is almost exactly like what happened after the Potter's murder. If only that something inside him had been there then...
Well done!

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Wow, I just came on here to see how others wrote Mature rape scenes, to see if mine was in any way okay. But I was really touched by this, and I think who ever wrote it has brilliant writing. It was worded very well.

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oh

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I never thought I'd be so touched by a tutorial! Great job. *sniff* Great job!!! I'm glad that it wasn't either Dorcas or Sirius who did the raping...I am now shipping their relationship! Sirius was so sweet in this too.

Yes, I know it's only a tutorial, but it touched me anyway, okay?

10/10.

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Whoa, this story could easily get a 15+/Teen/PG-13/another equivalent rating on another site. The same goes for if it appeared in a movie. But I guess you guys have the power to make rules the way you want them. I guess if "A Clockwork Orange" was a fanfiction, you'd kick it out into the streets. . . lol

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*tear tear* that was very powerful-- not gross or anything, but it made me sympathize with a fictional character!

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Great story.. fabulously worded. <3

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aww..this is so sad. Great writing though!

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