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Review #1, by Lyn Midnight Confiscation

3rd May 2006:
Okay, that was a funny one-shot. First, about the minor mistakes, then some comments on the idea.

You miss quite a few commas. Example: "Watcha doing Sirius?" should be "Whatcha doing, Sirius?" and "Nothing." Sirius assured him should be "Nothing," Sirius assured him.

Oh, and it is spelled Sirius's and James's. Only plural does not take the extra S. That's very important. Most people skip the extra S, but the rules are clear :)

I like the fact that you included lots of dialogue, that really brings life to the story. you can just imagine them sitting and making plans to cause trouble.

It is good that Remus grew a backbone in your story, though he silenced later. I can understand him, having friends is great, sometimes you just have to agree so that you can all have fun :) However, I think he can be really brave, and responsible, but some people leave him in the background.

Now, I am confused. Where were Snape and pettigrew when they met? And why is Snape making a comment about Peter with his wand out. He is not a prefect. I think he was just trying to avoid trouble in his school days, rather than looking for them. I mean that the other Marauders will get back at him, won't they?

And finally, I really liked the words on the map! They are hilarious :P The great Squib, lol.

Author's Response: Thank you for the critique. I know I have some editing to go back and do when I get a chance.

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Review #2, by Charmed Ravenclaw Confiscation

4th August 2005:
Poor Peter *cough cough* not!

Author's Response: Hey now, be nice to Peter.

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Review #3, by steve34 Confiscation

28th June 2005:
Nice opening. A great insight into the lives of the Marauders. I can actually see them being like that. Well done. On to chapter 2.

Author's Response: The Marauders are interesting to write.

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Review #4, by Sophia Montgomery Confiscation

28th June 2005:
Funny trick! Good chapter.

Author's Response: Hey, thanks Sophia!

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Review #5, by Wintershadows Confiscation

27th June 2005:
Awwww! Poor Peter! That was one of the cutest Maruader fics I've read in a long time. What year are they in? I seemed to be thinking they're still playful eleven or twelve year olds. Just a few grammar points to watch out when you're spacing paragrahs and commas here and there. Nothing that interrupts the flow of the story though, good job with the first chapter!

Author's Response: I didn't actually have a specific year in mind when I wrote it, but maybe second year now that I think about it.

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Review #6, by trixytonks Confiscation

27th June 2005:
nice beginning! shows the wonderful innocence of youth, it's so horrible to think what's gona happen to those four. you have a few minor punctuation errors, you might want to work on those. might I suggest getting a beta reader in the forums? you write a great Remus, he reacted just like I thought he would. I always picture him and Sirius clashing over pranks! good work, kid!

Author's Response: Punctuation errors? I'll go back and check. Thanks so much!

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