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Reading Reviews for Vacation Bliss
6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by RA Black Vacation Bliss

28th July 2006:

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Review #2, by anna Vacation Bliss

23rd April 2005:

Author's Response: Thanx!

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Review #3, by corriebird Vacation Bliss

13th April 2005:
hey, this has the potential to be a good story, but you rushed through it WAY WAY too fast. why did you spend more time on harry and rons conversation than HERMIONE and ron? thats who the storys about!!!! another thing... are you sure two days later hermione called ginny to tell her she got there safely? wouldn't it be two hours? you obviously like reading enough to ready harry potter- read some other books too, to get a sense of style, of grammar. some of your scentences are WAY out there, and your characterization isn't very realistic. would REAL people just say things like that? REAL people have doubts and fears and insecureties, not even a best friends assurances can make them feel better sometimes. take a look at how the people around you act, how you would act in situations like this. then put THAT in your characters. it'll make a more enjoyable story.

Author's Response: Thanx, I know I rushed through I have said it more than once, every writer has there own style and I must admit this is not my best I just wanted to have a story out, I am working on a much better one.

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Review #4, by chinese_fireball Vacation Bliss

4th April 2005:
Okay, I think

Author's Response: oks thanx for reading, i know its not the best

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Review #5, by Lisa Vacation Bliss

9th March 2005:
Ok I am like an expert at reading stories so I have some suggestions. You should first of all probably incorporate the Hermione and Ginny conversation into the story. And the ending was kind of sudden. Stretch it out a bit more. Put tension into it. Hope I helped you out on your first fic. Good luck with writing other fanfic stories.

Author's Response: Thank you for the advice, I appreciate structured critism, not just rude remarks. I appreciate your input thank you.

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Review #6, by jojow Vacation Bliss

27th February 2005:
it's a nice story but a terrible writingstyle

Author's Response: thanx, this was my first story, and i really wasn't too fond of the style myself, i wrote too fast, i was way too excited.

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