this is pretty good for your first fic. My first fic was a one shot too. I have a few question, before i ask it just know that this is MY opinion it has no affect what so ever on your writing. Why would Snape date Hermione? Isnt Severus Snape like old enough to be her dad? i like how you worded it you might want to make it a little longer next time i really liked it but like i said you should make it just a little longer and Im just not that fond of that age situation lol i like it otherwise =) Report Review
I can't see either character acting like this. Report Review
Hey that was good. Kinda dirty but in a good way. You write well. Report Review
well i wasnt expecting that coupling... good job though as odd as it was to read something with them two in it Report Review
Kinky lol Report Review
Hermione is way lucky! I think i somehow know what their gonna 'do'! Report Review
hmmm...different...enjoyable...maybe a bit longer...but overall good Report Review
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