hey it was nice but there r so many spelling mistakes plz correct them

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Good story, but I have a little tip for you: Try not to mix the peolpe telling the story, I mean, different PoVs is ok, but try not to go from third person to first person in the same PoV. That makes the text a little confusing to read. With that being said, please post another chapter

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good so far! really funny and witty! chapters are a bit short but it's good! i cracking up at the fred and george bet thing but that seems like something they would do! update soon and do try to add more detail!other than that keep up the good work!

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Well, I have to say that your grammar is horrible, but other than that it makes for a good story.

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YOUR A FAT PIE EATER

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Dobbys Delite???....hmmm...alright right story.....see ya *Winky*

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i likes your story

Author's Response: thanks much

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Please continue - I want to see what everyone says when they find out!!

Author's Response: thank u i need some ideas, if u have any ideas for the up coming chapters email me at harrypotter1345@hotmail.com thanks much muah!

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I don't mind POV stories, but take that away, and you barely wrote a paragraph. If you're going to continue with this, you really must make the chapters a lot longer.

Author's Response: thanks i didnt realize how short it was! i am working on the second and it shall be longer.

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