Hmmm yea that was ok the grammar wasn't that good and it was a bit confusing but still a good story keep it up. Report Review
this is going to begreat keep at it Report Review
Great story but please use paragraphs! I like the story a lot but one big blog makes it harder to read. Report Review
Well, it could use some work but you have a promising future to write very good Harry Potter stories. Have you ever thought of maybe writing something different? perhaps something with not as many characters? Report Review
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