Yay, such a cool story! Update soon!

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The only thing that makes me sad is that Zach is in my house. Yes, I'm a Ravenclaw and very proud to be one. Zach is a disappiontment to te Ravenclaw house.Rowena would not have been proud.
10/10

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I was never so pleased to find out the main characters boyfriend was cheating on her :) I crossed my fingers when he said he "had homework" and I hoped he was cheating. Carla, of course, proved it :) Carlas the best :) She's a good character and now my favorite.
And I could just hug Nicki for being the other girl! Why, because that means Zach likes her better! I will forever be greatful to Nicki for corrupting Zach! Unless he was already corrupted.Oh well! Hurray for Nicki!
And go Remus for telling her, I just wish Natty wasn't so immature.
In honor of Nicki, I will use the name in one of my stories :) guess you now know how much I like Remus.Yeah, fantazing about fictional characters isnt healthy.at least I'm not in love with cartoon characters like my friends! At least the book character that I like has traits that a real person can have and not a half cat...And Remus is actually imagined as an actually person and not a drawling. My friends just don't understand why I think its weird dreaming about anime characters when im dreaming about book characters.
sorry I'm ranting...That's how happy I am!
10/10!

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I HATE Zach! Why must there be no good Remus/OC stories


No offense, but I want to push Zach off the Astronomy Tower! Yes, I am a very violent person.

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grrr...hes being a douche! i want the nice Remus back!

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awww hes so sweet! i want a remus of my own... :)

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aww...im sorry Remmy! she'll get over it...right?

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i would try to not have some many "random occurrences" like having her fall and stuff...its over the top...but other than that its pretty good.

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Wow love this story so much! It was brilliant, give yourself a pat on the back! ^_^
Can't wait to read the sequel!
marauderqueen.
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I love this story is very very good and I have to say that I love the fact that you made Remus watch TV and know what it was, so many people seem to forget he's a halfblood and make him not know about muggle things

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the paragraphs are too long...heavy to the reader's eyes...it would be better if you divide them into smaller paragraphs...

Author's Response: I did for later chapters.this was the first fanfic (or story in general) that I ever wrote, so I was still getting the hang of it. Perhaps one day I will go back and re-edit everything, but at this point, I'm still just trying to finish the sequel to this one. Between school and work, time to write has been practically non-existant, and combine that with writers block, and you've got a problem. Thanks for the criticism though! I do appreciate it!

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Hi Moonysgirl4life
well, all i can say is dat u did a pretty good job. U know normally people don't really write long stories focussing Remus as the main character n am gald u did 'cause he has always been my fav. among the marauders.
I must say u toyed really well with the marauders, lily n ofcourse 2 of ur very own imaginary frnds.
Although, there r sumthins i wud like to point out. Firstly, i wud say writing was nice with proper usuage of nice words but, then certain events like kissing fiasco with sirius, i think u pushed it a bit over d edge n well, Remus's reaction was justified n all. Anyways, dey were together in d end and dat was nice. Overall, story made a nice read. Good job!
-Aashna

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OMG! please update soon! I'm so totally in love with this story!!

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ooh, cute first chappie! i know you've written like thirty or more or something, but i wanted to say that i think it's ADORABLE and i really like it! :D

-prettypinkpony

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Loved this one.
I like Zach but something is telling me that he is a bad guy, maybe because he wants help even thougth he is Raweclaw

10/10

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Noo I have just begun to like Remus again, But i cant wait to read the next

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I liked it, I think Nathalie is doing the right thing to ignore Remus, I know i would.
I am starting to like this story :)

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well, its a good story, but things seem to happen kind of fast. But thats not necessarily a bad thing, because in some stories it takes forever for something to happen and i get sick of waiting and reading boring chapters before the main event, or before whoever it is gets together... and yeah. so thats not really a bad thing.

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well, i'd have to agree, I wouldn't mind kissing Remus in a deserted common room either... I imagine it would be quite a pleasant experience! ^_^

Good story. I like it.

10/10

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I think it was well written. i just started getting into it and then it finished)= just make sure that your plot isn't to predictable. Because there is nothing worse than a predictable plot.

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That was cute how Remus handled her :3
But to me there was something missing -scratches head-

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that was a yery good book!it was awesome!

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Very good first chapter. :)

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He tries to rape her and gets pranked as punishment? That's all? Isn't rape illegal in the wizarding world?
And her supposed friends don't even take her to Madam Pomfrey's or get her any professional help - she just gets over it on her own by the next day?

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AHH! remus and natalie are too cute! i liked how this story is starting. and i like the way you introduced sirius by saying he dated a lot of people's share of girls. the only thing that seemed overused is where there's always a group of girls that hang out with the marauders. but other than that this was a good chapter ^_^

Author's Response: Looking back, I now realize that the whole group of girls and marauders thing is in fact overused, however, when I started writing this story, I had only read a few fanfics and only 1 of which was about Remus, so I wasn't aware of what was common place. Originally this fic just started out as a way for me to put my friends and I into Harry Potter for fun, and I had no intention of writing a 30 chapter fanfic that spawned 2 sequels, but as the story progressed and changed from where I was originally going with it, it took on a mind of it's own lol.

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