Wow! This is really good! I am very impressed! I love all the detail! I almost found myself crying a few times as it is so sad! But I really can't wait for more! 10/10Author's Response: Oh. I can't tell you how happily surprised I am to see a review on this story! :) Aw, I'm sorry it almost made you cry, but I'm glad you liked it. Thanks! :) Report Review
I liked the way that you used half-sentences to emphasize a point. It was skillfully used, and normally would have caused a disaster, but you avoided that perfectly. Also, I like that you have Cho blame herself for everything, even though it's clearly not her fault. You used an apostrophe in Ravenclaws where it shouldn't have been, though. I liked how you referred to Him as 'the thing of evil.' You said scared in one of your paragraphs... did you mean scared, or scarred?
Overall, I loved the story, and am putting it on my favorites list!Author's Response: I'm glad you think so. I never really notice that I'm doing it until someone points it out. :) Did I? Oh, I'm horrid with typos sometimes. I probably did mean scarred. Thanks so much! ;) Report Review
Wow, this was briliant. I really liked this paragrpah since you describe it wonderfully and I thought that it was a really good opening for a one-shot.
How can such wonderful things take a turn for the worst? How come every ray of hope and sunshine is always shattered before my very eyes? What did I do to deserve this pain? How can I handle causing so much pain?
Brillaint! Well done, I really enjoyed this fic and is thinking about seeing if you have any others. *grins* good job!Author's Response: Thank you! :) I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was a bit worried about the first paragraph having too many questions. ;) Thanks again! Report Review
Well despite what you thought I THOUGHT it worked perfectly. You don't get to see a lot of Cho do you? She has always been a secondary character and I liked the insite into her mind. You worked it well!!! What would have been hysterical was if she burst into tears at the end! Ha ha now that would have been totally amusing...Good stuff!!! I'm not gonna stop bothering you until you write a series :-)Author's Response: Thanks! :) No, you don't. Though I suppose the thing I really like about her is the fact that she reminds me slightly of a friend (though, their personalities contrast greatly...), and I adore Cho/Cedric. I don't even know why. I have an odd preferance for only Ginny or OCs to be with Harry. Yeah, hopefully I'll get down to that. :) Thanks again, dear! Report Review
>> WOW! This was such an intense story, and I've never really read a fanfic that expresses the thoughts of Cho. She can be such an anonymous character when written by JK Rowling, and you have really done a fabulous job of turning her into a person, and a character that I don't think of as Harry's failed love interest. What a great story! Interesting, but semi depressing. Very enjoyable... :D 5 stars!Author's Response: Thanks very much! I had no idea I was capable of such things. :) Report Review
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