Great start! This story is so original, I can't wait to see where you take it. Keep up the great work!

Author's Response: Unfortunately I am sorry to say my notebooks full of the story and the notes were destroyed in Katrina. So I won't be able to finish that story, but at home I was able to begin another story very similar. I don't want to begin on Blood Red Ties b/c I put many months of effort into and I can't find the energy to start again. So we'll see whats up. Sorry!

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It totally sucks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: to each his own i suppose.

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Don't upload a document from your computer...its easier if you just copy and paste it! And just space it out in sections at a time, because this site sets you on a timer. So maybe that might help. Good luck with your story...can't wait for the next chapter! Peace Out!!

Author's Response: thanks!

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this story rocks i cant wait to read the next one, but can you tell me what a adept is exactly

Author's Response: thanks! all the information about adepts will come up later in the story.

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I agree with scabbers_weasly, with the spacing it does make it easier to read.

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Alright, just one question. Sort of bugging me, what's with the Peter Parker and Spiderman. I get the message that you're trying to protray by using it. But I don't think Ron knows about Spiderman. lol. Okay, moving on...

The story seems interesting. I'm sort of curious to how the Japanese characters play with your story...and curious to see how everything unfolds through the eyes of Ron. Very well written, look forward to reading more. Oh, and check out the site, its really good! Peace Out!!

Author's Response: the prologue from ron's pov is set two years into the future, you'll find out he knows alot more! ^_^

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