I like this start. I'm guessing it's not going to go further than this, since this was published so long ago, but I do like this start. The spacing was a little distracting, since I'm used to either indented paragraphs or a line of space between two paragraphs, but that's not a big deal. This is creative - I haven't seen many with James as a Quidditch World Cup star, and I definitely haven't seen any with Lily and Arabella Figg being flatmates. I like that idea. Overall, pretty good writing. A couple missing commas and stuff, but it wasn't all that distracting. Good work!

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I really wish you hadn't abandoned this, it looks like it could have been a good start to an even better story. The only thing that bothered me was the spacing. It's just a bit hard to read even good writing when it's all crammed together. Other than that, nice job.

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This story has a lot of potential!

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Haha that was cute. Really good set up.

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good work. I like the earlier generation stories.

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Okay. I'm loving where this going. Is it sorta AU? Anyway. Update soon!

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Aw so cute!!

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Lol! Different, but very funny.

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wow i relly like this cant wait to see what happens

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Hmm,it's good...3!

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i loved it.please hurry with the next part

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This is a cute story.
Shows the life of Harry Potter's parents.
very awesome.

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Hahaha that was pretty awesome!! You should WRITE MORE!! I would really like to read more of this story!! I love lily and james stories!! Mucho looveee!! Your an awesome writer!

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a good effort by an amateauristic novelist, i personally believe there to be too much focus on the owl in it's short sequence and believe that there should possibly be some more synonyms introduced. The general plot seems to run thin and the characters leave a lot to the imagination.

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funny is this how you spectalate James meets Lily is Bella jealous or what

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that was a wonderful story for some one who doesn't know as much about harry potter. This story isn't acurate even if the story of before was never told. This is wrong one because James Potter was a seeker. Two you shouldn't hacve named Lilys friend Arabella because it's like having a friend just as close to Bellatix. Why would the both have simular names. Third the story of how james and Lily met is nothing like that. James and Lily went to hogwarts together. James likes Lily but Lily thinks that he is a evil stuck up show off. But then they end up together because he changed his ways and then fait. That story is ment for someone who only read the first book. They could have never read the others or saw the movie because then they would know that that never could have happened. Me on the other hand has read ever book and watched ever movie more than 20 times or more each. So unless you know what you are doing please don't write fiction that doesn't make since.

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This is an awsome story. It should be a little longer. I can't wait to see what happens.

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How old is Harry when he is summoned to Hogwarts

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this story is very nice

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LOL, this put a huge smile on my face.

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Awesome!!! I love it! It's a great concept and a wonnderfully original fic. Keep writing because I'm dying to know how this plays out!!!

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I love your story so far you have to post soon

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i read your story a long time ago and now you haven\'t gone verry much farther in it... well to tell you the truth there is no change in it. are you going to finish it or what? come on you have to finish you have a great story going on.

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Finish! Finish! PLease?!

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this was really really good please write more very very soon cos i would love to read the end of this

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