That little piece of dialogue you have put there, between Sirius and Remus, has to be óne of the most polished treassures I have ever come across.
When every word stung, and one has to wonder, just how two friends, as close as we always imagined them to be, could have grown this vicious.
Sentences like that don´t form overnight. They are the work of long nights, of wounds, kept secret, regardless how small. True friends can hurt each other and come out forgiving. But this - this wasn´t it.
i really would like to see you try your hand at some more Remus/Sirius centric stories, that focus on that rift. Which must have existed even in the earliest stages of their friendships.
Whatever, whater, whatever!.a great story, as usual - and, for some reason, one I have read only twice. I forgot why that was.for it is now my favourite.
peace, and a good life ;T Report Review
I really enjoyed your story:) You've accomplished what every story is meant to, stating a point. Great job! Report Review
Yet again, a great chapter! I enjoy the cliffhanger on the end, but love the fact that the next chapter's already up:D Report Review
Another wonderful chapter! Report Review
Another great chapter! Well done!:) Report Review
I loved this chapter!:) Report Review
Whoa, the first two chapters went by really fast! But that's a good thing. That means I'm liking this story! Good work. Report Review
Can you imagine just what might have happened had Sirius remained Secret Keeper..?
Love the story so far! :)
-Allie Report Review
Well, it was sn interesting story none the less, there was just too many punctuation mistakes. Don't get me wrong it was good, so i'll give you a 9/10! Report Review
good part 10/10
reading next chapter now Report Review
Well, everything was pretty boring to be quite honest with you, good writing though
7/10 Report Review
That was so sweet, James asked Sirius to be Harry's godfather, how cute. Anyway, i noticed there was an absence of semi-colons and your commas are still very misplaced, apart from that however, eveything was good:)
7/10 Report Review
Well, your writing style seems very simple to start with, it's not neccesarily bad but it could be greatly improved, you have a weak use of descriptive language but your dialogue seems to be ok. Grammar seems fine, punctuation was nearly perfect, you just need to work on editing your use of commas in this chapter, there are many that have been misplaced. The storyline however hasd a fault. In the books Albuys Dumbeledore makes it quite clear to Harry that Voldemort found out about the prophecy after Harry was born, the prophecy was also made after Harry was born, so Lily wouldn't have been expecting a baby during the time she and James were hiding in Godric's Hollow, she'd have already had it.
Just thought i'd let you know about.
8/10 Report Review
Sorry I haven't reviewed before but I like this. The ending made me laugh. Report Review
*falls out of her chair* ARGH! great story just hate how it had to end there! Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to read and review! Report Review
Wow, this is a really good story! Its really short though! You are a really good writer! Great Job!!Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
"I'll rot in Azkaban before that happens." Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! Report Review
good chapterAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for the review! Report Review
very good, love your portrayal of emotionAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for the review! Report Review
i don't really think sirius would put so much stock into his own last name when he's obviously thrown his lot with james, but its a great story all the same. Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! Report Review
LOVED the closing line! on to the next chapter...its a good story, and you're brilliant as ever!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
I just read the whole thing at once and it was really good. I like how you chose to end it. Nicely done!Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! Report Review
What a great story! Really understaed, excellent dialogue and generally just well -written. I always thought that Peter would be slick--not really alerting anyone to how sneaky he really was, and that's how he came across, feigning concern for the Potters when he was already working for VOldemort. Well done!Author's Response: Thank you!! Report Review
You have good conversations in this chapterAuthor's Response: Thank you!! Report Review
This Chapter is very good, but you should work on making the chapters longerAuthor's Response: Thank you!! Report Review
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