This was seriously the BEST fan fiction i have actually EVER read! Please please please do more!

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Thats really good :)

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loved it but was a littled disturbed when they frenched it up. But come on how can i not love it? haha good job you should write other fan fictions and if you have im sure i wann read them :)

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so good

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GOOD!! love it cant stop reading it :D

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One of the best stories! It ended so nicley! You are a great writer!

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OK, so this isn't going to be a review for just the chapter, it's going to be for the entire story (got that?). Anyway, overall, I thought it was a really cute story (the kind you can't stop smiling at). The first half was a little slow, but I enjoyed your style of wrtiting (a lot of other writers on here try to write like JK Rowling) so I kept reading. It just felt a little too parallel to the fifth book (well, that may be due to the fact that I'm re-reading the seires again and just finished the fifth book). In chapter 8, maybe 9, I forgot which one, Mrs. Weasley talks to Ron and Hermione about their love lives when I saw that she says the same thing I was like "oh, it's so repetive," but after seeing that she did that with all her kids I thought it was a really good idea. My final thing I want to say was that I wish you were a little more discriptive of the kiss between Ron/Hermione. Not physically (you covered that) but more emotionally (and don't use 'electricity'. you already used that describing Harry/Ginny's kiss). Like, what I would use is:
"as soon as their lips made contact, both of them felt a wave of passion flow through them. Everything around them seemed insignificant (woah, i totally spelled that WRONG! maybe) as long as they were with one another. Hermione instantly knew that she could never love another man. Meanwhile, Ron just wanted to hold her tight and never let her go, keeping her safe and letting her know that she would be his forever."
Infact, that's so good maybe I'll use it (haha!)
Um, if you get the time, maybe you could read my story? It's called "Overreacting". It follows Ron and Hermione three years after the second Wizarding War and i'm putting in lots of twists :). I'm really excited 'cause it's my first story to go up on here. Right now, I only have 1 chapter up, but I have about 6 written.
Hope you enjoy my critique (I think that's how you spell it. If not, oh well)

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It's just. amazing!!! Well done!!!

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oh, so close! they better kiss in the next chapter!!

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i love it. really cool stuff.

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Ha ha! i love it. really funny.

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You need to follow on from the end of this story and make it a bit longer. I woud like to see what happens when Harry, Ron, Hermione and Ginny does when they get older

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it was wonderful!!!

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its reallygood so fair i will reviewlater when im done ok !


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I like your storie very much.
Just can you make Harry not that mean.

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i loved

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hey- i actually havn't read this chapter, but i will, i will. i think it starts out really good. I like Harry portrayed in such a humorous way-its really funny. other authors always make Harry seem so bitter, but uve put him in a favorable light-nice!

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love your story, its one of the best r/h ive read, i can never find any that work... well done! its excellent!

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of course we'll make time for you. I'm just sad the story has to end.

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Why does there have to be one chapter left?

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You better add me to that list there!

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Fabulous.

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Wonderful.

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Haha very funny/good

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This is getting so good!

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