excellent story! kinda figured snape was in love with her and they'd get together but liked that she married remus, albeit too short a time. love the character roxanne and that you didn't hestitate to almost kill her off. nice twist. also like how she discovered her nephew was a wizard too. hope there is a sequel of some sort. would love to see how things go for her as a mommy of twins and such. keep up the great work! Report Review
This was a fantastic story and I hope you have more completed for me to read. I can't believe you killed Lupin! Report Review
Lupin a gentleman and a badass I like that. Good store I want to finish it soon. Report Review
great story! you have to write more! Report Review
excellent Report Review
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I really liked THE MARK OF WAR! There are no words to describe how great it was! I expected it to be great, and it was even better than I imagined! It\'s a shame it can\'t be published... That is all I can say. I\'ll be writing a story soon on this website, so check for it! Bye!
-----PhoenixFerret Report Review
Wow. That\'s all I can say right now. Wow. What an excellently written story! I usually don\'t like fan fiction with different main characters, but this one is an exception. You created a new character that was lovable, courageous, heroic, but also had her flaws; what an amazing achievement! You had me laughing, crying, gripping my seat in fear, and my heart fluttering in happiness. I don\'t think I need to say that it takes a skilled writer to get this from their readers.
Another thing I don\'t particularly enjoy in fan fiction is when characters date and/or marry off. But the love you created between Roxanne and Remus was such a genuine, sweet, and natural thing (I mean, they didn\'t fall in love purely because that\'s what the author wanted, but because the author created a situation that allowed that to happen slowly and surely), that during Remus\'s proposal, I was begging (yes, out loud) for Roxanne to say yes.
You say you want criticism, but I really don\'t have any. I can honestly say that this is the best Harry Potter fan fiction I have ever read. Well, ok, I do have one little criticism. The beginning was a bit too slow (just her first summer at Hogwarts). I struggled through it a little, but I\'m really glad I kept reading!
Bravo! You kept the characters real, J.K. Rowling\'s original storyline true, and the excellent writing never faltered! A big round of applause! *clap, clap, clap, clap*
I loved it!! awesome story and her having twins was neat. Report Review
wow, i loved it. is that really the end? i want more. i want to know about the twins\' years at hogwarts and if voldemort was defeated and everything else in between. Report Review
Kept me by the CPU for an hour. I loved how u made some of ur own carachters And how u made it so long. Report Review
I thought the story you wrote was great. It had a lot of imagination and kept the reader interested. It was actually one of the best stories I read of Harry potter\'s stories. Report Review
Hey great story! It was so sad when Remus died! I thought Roxanne had gone back to America! Then she suddenly happened to be with everyone else giving birth! Report Review
I tip my hat to you. this was an outcome I didn\'t even expect. Wonderful job! I can\'t wait to read your next story. Keep writing. Report Review
Wondrful story. I have really come to enjoy the character of Roxanne. I could not stop reading it. Please post the other chapters. Report Review
wow awesome story...great conclusion, make a follow up pleaaaasee Report Review
Oh, oh, oh am I enjoying this story! It has a bit of everything. I can\'t wait for more chapters. This is turning out to be my favorite fic yet. Keep the pages coming!!!!!!!!! Report Review
Thanks to everyone for the reviews thus far. A special thanks to dana for the great critique. I\'ve done some editing in response, though I\'m not sure I\'m willing to change the first chapter. I didn\'t want too much description or history to bore everyone right up front, so I kept it terse, leaving a lot of questions to be answered as the book progresses. I\'ve had a lot of fun writing this, and now I\'m reading it to my family--they love it! AND I\'m using the practice here to start another book--one that\'s all my own. Everyone wish me luck! Report Review
Please right more! Something should deffinatly happen between Roxanne and Remus! They will be soo sweet together! Right more/post more chapters. Please. Plz Plz Plz plz plz Please! Report Review
I really like your story!! Keep writing!!! Report Review
I\'ve been recently reading quite a bit of these stories based on Rowling\'s story, and have to say that this is definitely one of the best. That character was very well developed - made me interested in reading more about her. I would suggest that you work on some simple grammatical problems that most authors are lucky enough to have editors handle for them. The Letter was particularly in need of some proper punctuation - hard to tell where the letter\'s text broke from the scene descriptions.
Think I\'ll be waiting for you coming chapters almost as much as Rowling\'s. This was a lot of work, and I, for one, appreciated it. dana Report Review
Ooops, forgot one more thing. The beginning of the first chapter needs some work. The flow is quite choppy and difficult to discern one character from the other at first. A little more description ahead of the fight between the brother and sister might help. Report Review
THAT IS DOWN RIGHT MEAN!!!!!!!! I HAVE BEEN WAITING FOR WEEKS FOR YOU TO UPDATE!!!!! JUST DO IT ALL READY!!!!!!!!! Report Review
a very unusual story, i\'ve never read 1 like it, ur a good writer and u must have a good imagination to think of something that is so different from cannon, if u have time plz read+review my fic harry potter and the ghosts from the past
Amber Report Review
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