Oookay then. Still some of those comma issues. And Kate...I don't know she's not anywhere in the books and this sort of distorts the third book. Perhaps it should be under AU? I don't know. Interesting concept, though. Slighlty random, but interesting.

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Oh no! The poor thing! I hope it turns out all right. Nice building of intensity. One thing: (this time it really is one) there should be a comma here: '"Don't be stupid--->,<---" she said to herself"

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A little short, but looks interesting. Just one thing, though. There should be commas after all the speaking. ("I like cats," Jane confessed). Also, when people are talking, they mostly seem to "say" and "reply", a couple synonyms would be good. Okay so that was two things...

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I don't understand how Kate comes into the story, even though I enjoy this story very much, you don't say much about Kate in this story until the end, but in the books a girl named Kate was never with them, so you know...

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this is well gd. please update soon 400000000 out of 10!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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this story is really good! I like the character Kate, she is interesting!

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Interesting. I like this story.

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omg! I love this story! I like the new added character. I always kinda thought there should be another werewolf at Hogwarts! I liked the way she and Remus were kind of connected.

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I first read your story cuz I realized your name from your reviews in Mending the Marauders, but I actually love your story so far! It's really good!

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It would have been a cool twist if Kate was actually Lupins daughter, but if it is true and I'm just blind I like it anyways!

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Is Kate another werewolf? That would be so cool!

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Oh no, poor Lupin, he didn't mean too, whats going to happen now?

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I like how you describe the beginnings of his transformation, pain is always something that is difficult to describe.

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I saw you asking for reviews, so I decided to try this one. It's okay, but not enough background. I was lost when you mentioned Kate. The idea is great, but needs a bit of flushing out. I think you have great potential.

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I love this story its one of my favorites!!!

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Wow! I cried. So So sad. Especially chapter 4. Please Please write more Please? Brianna

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That's a really great story. i really enjoyed reading it. and thanxs for reviewing my story. Do you think you could read my other one and give me an idea cause i kinda did something to a character, and don't know how to get him out of it. keep writing

Author's Response: Thaks for the review, I love ur story too!

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That was great! It was a brilliant idea to write the stories as if before the ones today came out.

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That's a wicked story! I love it!!!

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Well written! I enjoyed it. The only thing that threw me a little was the way it switched point of view from Sirius to Remus at the end. I think it'd work better to stick to one POV (you could still say the same things, but have it so Sirius sees what you've written as Remus thinking), or have a line break if you definitely want to switch character.

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Author's Response: Thanx I'll remember that.

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This is a good story so far, well written! Please update soon, I need to know what happens!

Author's Response: Yay! my first review!

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