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Review #1, by randomwriter Chapter 1 - Uneasy Dream

9th July 2014:
House Cup 2014 review: Educational Decree Number Five

Hello! I'm here to review your story for the House Cup! This was an insightful one-shot into Harry's mind. It truly reflected how Harry might have been feeling after that night when he watched Cedric die. It's completely natural to have nightmares after a traumatic incident like that. Especially nightmares about your loved ones dying and things like that. I think that you wrote the letters really well. The first one really reflects how distressed Harry was. The second one shows us how concerned Sirius is. You wrote the ending well too. However, I did find some major inconsistencies with canon that you might want to fix! You also had a few spelling and grammatical errors. Apart from that, this was a good read! :)

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Review #2, by nott theodore Chapter 1 - Uneasy Dream

9th July 2014:
Hello there! I'm here reviewing stories in the house cup which refer to the upsetting events of last year - it isn't allowed, you know!

I thought this was a really good story and I enjoyed reading it. I didn't spot many typos or grammar mistakes but as a little bit of constructive criticism, I'd suggest changing the formatting of the piece and introducing some more spaces between lines of speech, just because the presentation makes it a little difficult to read.

I liked the way that you portrayed Harry and the other two in the trio, Ron and Hermione, in this story. I think they're quite difficult to write about but you did a good job here. You did a great job of showing the way that the events in the Triwizard Tournament have affected Harry afterwards and the fact that Cedric's death is still haunting him. Sirius's letter seemed to work well and read as though he'd written it too. I thought this was well written and enjoyable - well done!

Sian :)
Gryffindor House Cup 2014 Review Educational Decree #5

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Review #3, by Kaitlyn Longbottom Chapter 1 - Uneasy Dream

20th July 2004:
Very good and interesting. The only thing that could have been better are the details, once yo have masterd those, you could be as as Ms. Rowling herself.

Author's Response: Thank you, i very much appreciate your review.

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