{reviewid: 1946489, reviewer: 'MoonyandProngs'}
9th June 2008:
That was great and I loved it! I loved they were going to have a baby at the end. Great work!
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{reviewid: 1894421, reviewer: 'l'}
13th April 2008:
hey so first off i loved the idea for your story
but your writing is a bit immature, you arent overly descriptive in your writing or very patient, you just rush rush rush things until its the end, we never saw the relationship between harry and hermione form and with ron adn lavender all of a sudden they were dating, the story has got to flow and the characters have to develop, im sure if you take mroe time on your stories next time they will improve
great idea thou and dont get discouraged
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{reviewid: 1091608, reviewer: '103'}
4th August 2006:
looooooooooooooooooooooooooooovvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeedddddddddddddddddddd iiiiiiiiiiiitttttttttttttt
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{reviewid: 1086860, reviewer: 'kitty4321'}
1st August 2006:
You're right, you do stink at this, no affence. I don't think you went slow enough and I really don't think you got the personalities right.I have a request though,this story is centered around 1 thing.....sex. God says that you are not supposed to have sex until after you are married. And I know that this is not a true story, but it reflects your oppinion on the subject. Please make a more .........clean story next time.
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{reviewid: 1086840, reviewer: 'kitty4321'}
1st August 2006:
Please don't use that type of language.........and by the way- I'm completely confused about this dream thing....
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{reviewid: 1086832, reviewer: 'kitty4321'}
1st August 2006:
This is moving way too fast!!!!!!!!!!!
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{reviewid: 944702, reviewer: 'darklordsnightmare'}
20th March 2006:
i love the ending.keep writeing.your good.
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{reviewid: 935688, reviewer: 'lala'}
13th March 2006:
omg that wuz amazing!! pls make ur chapters longer!!!!
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{reviewid: 900630, reviewer: 'lala'}
13th February 2006:
OMG!! THAT WAS THE HARRIEST ENDING I EVER READ IN OME OF THESE THINGS
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{reviewid: 892417, reviewer: 'RupertsPrincess101'}
6th February 2006:
Sucky ending? Sucky story is more likely. If you email it to me at alliek825@aol.com, I'll go over it and make a few changes.
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{reviewid: 818076, reviewer: 'bubblegum%20boy'}
19th December 2005:
im sorry but the way you wrote this was terrible...chapters shud have been longer and more detaild and you knw tht u can take things slow...there is no need to rush. a good idea though
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{reviewid: 723654, reviewer: 'Kat'}
7th October 2005:
Er this story is ok but you can tell it was your first fan fic.....
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{reviewid: 666312, reviewer: 'silentears57'}
25th August 2005:
well....it was a good story line, but im not sure if i like your writing style. i think its too fast and its not like them. but its good for a first..
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{reviewid: 633165, reviewer: 'Jillian%28J%20Lo%29'}
6th August 2005:
It was very good. You should add a bonus chapter, because you might get even more reveiews from it. So add it. And great job!
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{reviewid: 615021, reviewer: 'Rach'}
28th July 2005:
Was that meant to be amusing? Cuz I laughed pretty hard. Good story, if it was. :)
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{reviewid: 583636, reviewer: 'silentears57'}
8th July 2005:
I really think you could have made this a lot longer and better. It was a good story, but it ended far too soon and everything was rushed. You should have described their first night together, the dance. Stuff like that.
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{reviewid: 583610, reviewer: 'silentears57'}
8th July 2005:
awe! I realy liked this chapter. They are really cute together! Good job!
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{reviewid: 583598, reviewer: 'silentears57'}
8th July 2005:
I like this story...cept I wish the chapter werent so short! Good job though!
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{reviewid: 583594, reviewer: 'silentears57'}
8th July 2005:
short chapter but good so far. I know how it feels to be a first time writer. If u want you can check out my fan fic "I wish..." ill keep reading! good job!
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{reviewid: 500028, reviewer: 'dylanlover'}
13th May 2005:
write the bonus chapter, but make it alote longer! PLEASE! LOVE IT!
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{reviewid: 469339, reviewer: 'Ginny%20Weasly'}
20th April 2005:
That was okay, but your chapters were really short. Also, I did not hink that Harry and Hermione would really do all of the things that they did in your story?! It was nice, but please follow the characters that J.K.R. wrote.
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{reviewid: 394547, reviewer: '%2A-%2A%20DAN%20ROCKS'}
1st March 2005:
COOL< KEEP up, a bit more romance preferred, please, ANYWAY, keep going with other stories, you r really good at it...
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{reviewid: 389949, reviewer: 'heidi'}
24th February 2005:
Your chapters were to short. It was great write another
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{reviewid: 342839, reviewer: 'tiehrr'}
20th January 2005:
TO BLOODY SHORT
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{reviewid: 330065, reviewer: 'Rita%20Skeeter'}
11th January 2005:
Sorry, but it really stunk, short and stupid chapters
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