It's really good, and it has potential. Just one suggestion, you shouldn't have everything crammed in. It's really hard to read, but all-in-all it's interesting. I'll give you a 10/10! =)Author's Response: Thanks, I know irt's all crammed in, but this is just a product of boredom. my other story is top priority at the moment. I'll probably go ack and fix this up thgo, later Report Review
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